The Songs

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lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278	January 20th, 2007 at 12:53pm Reading seventeen lines I roll my eyes, click Delete. Delete but still I thought of you. The song that played For so many days until I screamed in my head, Screamed "Go away!" I heard it again and I thought of you. But now that fire has been replaced By a restless peace that won't erase The past I lived for, the present I see. And the future I dreamed of... No it won't ever be. I dreamed again, This time with sense. I thought and I thought and was it envy? Pure and green Trailing over my lungs and Piercing my vunerable heart? No, my bell. I was foolish. Our candle has melted And its flame flickered out. But still I think of you, Ringing, laughing. The song that played For so many days until I screamed in my head, Screamed "Go away!" I heard it again, smiling. I thought of you. I realized again that Memories don't end. But now they're just songs. And we are truly just friends. I was listening to some Avril songs the other night and when stuff happened between me and this friend, those songs really spoke to me and described my situation so perfectly. And when I listen to them the other night, I remembered the stuff I felt, but I didn't feel it. The songs carry a few memories, but they're not so painful now. The rythym isn't exactly right, I know, but I'll edit it later. Also, the main inspirtation here is that chainmail going around, "17 signs of being in love". So critique!
lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278	January 24th, 2007 at 12:25pm You people are so unloving. I feel hurt...mock sob
The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786	January 24th, 2007 at 01:41pm lyrical_mess: You people are so unloving. I feel hurt...mock sob I love this, the imagery is perfect and like...so yours. If that makes sense Except one tiny insignificant thing...I hate chain mail
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	January 24th, 2007 at 02:16pm Oh, I just loved this. The concept of chain mail really came through in the first stanza, and was really beautiful in such a lyrical way. 'Pure and green/Trailing over my lungs and/Piercing my vulnerable heart?' had to be my favourite lines.
lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278	January 24th, 2007 at 02:30pm Joan Greenwood: lyrical_mess: You people are so unloving. I feel hurt...mock sob I love this, the imagery is perfect and like...so yours. If that makes sense Except one tiny insignificant thing...I hate chain mail why do you think I rolled my eyes and deleted it?
lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278	January 24th, 2007 at 02:31pm Ginger Nuts: Oh, I just loved this. The concept of chain mail really came through in the first stanza, and was really beautiful in such a lyrical way. 'Pure and green/Trailing over my lungs and/Piercing my vulnerable heart?' had to be my favourite lines. Yeah, I loved myself for the envy stanza.
charmishgirl Geek Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 315	January 26th, 2007 at 04:38pm I like it!! You should right more!!
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD Falling In Love With The Board Age: 87 Gender: Female Posts: 5844	January 26th, 2007 at 07:04pm Babe... It's absolutely beautiful. It's just... I can't even describe how I feel about this. I wasnt so sure in the beginning... but in the end, it just came together so stunningly.. Bravo.

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