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I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Jackass
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1019

Mibba
February 8th, 2007 at 10:09pm
I know you have problems
But so do I.
Does that really give you
The right to lie?

A fib here and there
Isn't so painful.
But the way you act
Makes you seem disdainful.

You are not a "God"
And nor will you ever be.
I know I'm not perfect
But you obviously can't see.

All these people have left
But you're still here.
Although that doesn't bother you,
You're not sincere.

You couldn't care
A bit about them.
Nor do you care what I write
With the tip of my pen.

I'm expressing myself
And you're not hearing a word
So I'm going to leave you in your "glory"
Which is just the way you preferred.
greenday_rox_u
Geek
greenday_rox_u
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 132
February 9th, 2007 at 01:14am
i decline the world
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Jackass
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1019

Mibba
February 9th, 2007 at 07:28am
Does that really have anything to do with my poem?
Mrs. Lee
Jackass
Mrs. Lee
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 1428

Mibba
February 9th, 2007 at 11:46am
You are not a "God"
And nor will you ever be.
I know I'm not perfect
But you obviously can't see.

All these people have left
But you're still here.
Although that doesn't bother you,
You're not sincere.


I really like that bit.
I think your poem is simple.
But effective.
Don't know how I can tell you how to fix it.
Because I like it the way it is.

Keep writing. Very Happy
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Jackass
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1019

Mibba
February 9th, 2007 at 04:16pm
Thank you. ^_^
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
What's in a name?
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451

Mibba
February 11th, 2007 at 01:12pm
I think it’s good. You have this nice flow that I like. Some rhymes were a bit so so but overall I liked it. The simplicity of the wording and structure really suited the tone of it. Nicely done Very Happy
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Jackass
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1019

Mibba
February 11th, 2007 at 01:21pm
Thank you. =]
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
What's in a name?
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451

Mibba
February 12th, 2007 at 03:16am
greenday_rox_u:
i decline the world
I don't know what your post has got to do with the topic. To me it seems to be spam.

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