Sunset part 1

After staring for so long
Everything is such a blur.
But if I can just see it again
Then that's what I prefer.

The mixture of colors are
Oh so stunning.
I feel my feet move;
I've been running.

I'm so drunk in this happiness
That such something can confer
So please don't call me.
It'll barely be a murmur.

It’s really pretty and you rhymed well in my opinion. There’s just something about it that feels incomplete. Like why everything is a blur (probably from staring at the sunset?) and why the poem person have been running etc. It’s like the poem unintentionally raises a lot of questions which are left unanswered, if you know what I mean. Other than that I think your poem is real nice.

I know this may sound odd but I think I might make like.. a second poem called Sunset: Sequal. It'll answer the questions. Well, in a sense. xD But you're right about why their vision is blurry.

That would explain a whole lot =P But if you wanna write a sequel as you call it you should have put something like this in the title: “Sunset part I” or w/e. So everyone understands that there will be more.

There's no Edit button. O.o

I know. I think it’s there foe about 24 hours and then you’re unable to edit your post. What do you wanna edit? I’ll help ya.

I was gonnna change the title to "Sunset Pt. 1"

Ok, I'll make sure that's taken care of

Thankies. =]