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matt4life
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 14
 | February 11th, 2007 at 10:30pm It's called Silt My Wrist Now!:
once again it's been a shitting day. everyone telling me F***ing lies! i never know who to believe. everyone telling me to go to hell. i can't stand it!
silt My wrist Now! before i silt someones throat and get sent to jail. so please silt my wrist or GO TO HELL!
"Hey Gothic loser!" I hear all day long walking down the halls. i can't stand it any more. some ones going to die. "HEY EVERYONE GO TO HELL!" some one's going to die. i just can't f***ing stand it! so silt my wrist and save yourself. silt my wrist NOW! "everyone save yourself. stop calling me things behind my back. it well come back to me and bye bye to you. if you don't want that to happen then SLIT MY WRIST NOW! i really don't want to hurt anyone but if i have to i will kill if some one doesn't SLit MY WRIST NOW! slit, cut, slit, cut,slit,cut, MY WRIST!
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No i don't have an emo problem or anything. |
Buddy Christ
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Posts: 5821
 | February 11th, 2007 at 10:31pm Rock on! I knw how u feel.  . |
Sara.
This Board Is My Home
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 31155 | February 12th, 2007 at 12:13am Bam_Loves_Me:It's called Silt My Wrist Now!:
once again it's been a shitting day. everyone telling me F***ing lies! i never know who to believe. everyone telling me to go to hell. i can't stand it!
silt My wrist Now! before i silt someones throat and get sent to jail. so please silt my wrist or GO TO HELL!
"Hey Gothic loser!" I hear all day long walking down the halls. i can't stand it any more. some ones going to die. "HEY EVERYONE GO TO HELL!" some one's going to die. i just can't f***ing stand it! so silt my wrist and save yourself. silt my wrist NOW! "everyone save yourself. stop calling me things behind my back. it well come back to me and bye bye to you. if you don't want that to happen then SLIT MY WRIST NOW! i really don't want to hurt anyone but if i have to i will kill if some one doesn't SLit MY WRIST NOW! slit, cut, slit, cut,slit,cut, MY WRIST!
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No i don't have an emo problem or anything. ......Good try....? |
clark
GSBitch
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Posts: 79047 | February 12th, 2007 at 12:15am |
Addison Montgomery.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 7078
| February 12th, 2007 at 11:17am It's ok. |
cabot gal
GSBitch
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 76863
| February 12th, 2007 at 11:19am ...
LOL |
rollerpig
GSBitch
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 62283 | February 12th, 2007 at 11:19am how sucky. |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
| February 13th, 2007 at 04:52am ...O.O
That...wasn't very good. Or original. And it was rather scary. |
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Jackass
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1019
| February 13th, 2007 at 10:41am What the hell? That was sorta confusing. A song or whatever this is doesn't look good when you just bunch it up into a paragraph. And this kinda stuff has been said SO many times that I could write a song about it. There's a ton of things you need to work on. There's no need for f***ing. You can type the word fucking. Capitilized words aren't that necessary.
The slit, cut, slit, cut my wrists thing was a little too over done. And grammar just flies over your head.
Sorry if this sounds mean but I'm assuming that when you posted this you want helpful critisim. Well, there you go. |
Tyler Durden
Jackass
Age: -
Gender: Male
Posts: 1454
| February 13th, 2007 at 11:31am i know how u feel, but that's no need to write a song telling people to "GO to Hell"
it HAS been overdone. i know you can think of something Totally original, and yeah, it does sound Scary emo, you also might want to reword it.
Sorry if i sound like Simon Cowell, but i'm trying to help u grow as a songwriter.  |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
| February 13th, 2007 at 12:24pm Honestly that’s really not anything but a bunch of sentences. It doesn’t have the structure of lyrics or a poem and therefore it doesn’t really belong here. It’s more like some kind of prose and posting prose is against the rules.
#10
Next time, divide it into stanzas and use capital letters in the beginning of your sentences. Just a tip  |
DAMONE_doll_parts
Geek
Age: 103
Gender: Female
Posts: 266 | February 14th, 2007 at 10:41am Bam_Loves_Me:It's called Silt My Wrist Now!:
once again it's been a shitting day. everyone telling me F***ing lies! i never know who to believe. everyone telling me to go to hell. i can't stand it!
silt My wrist Now! before i silt someones throat and get sent to jail. so please silt my wrist or GO TO HELL!
"Hey Gothic loser!" I hear all day long walking down the halls. i can't stand it any more. some ones going to die. "HEY EVERYONE GO TO HELL!" some one's going to die. i just can't f***ing stand it! so silt my wrist and save yourself. silt my wrist NOW! "everyone save yourself. stop calling me things behind my back. it well come back to me and bye bye to you. if you don't want that to happen then SLIT MY WRIST NOW! i really don't want to hurt anyone but if i have to i will kill if some one doesn't SLit MY WRIST NOW! slit, cut, slit, cut,slit,cut, MY WRIST!
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No i don't have an emo problem or anything.
Uummm...thats not a song...thats a suicidal rant..
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