Mrs. Lee
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 | February 23rd, 2007 at 05:30am Halos without angels.
Its the end of the world?
And we all still know it.
My mother speaks.
And we all heard it.
Don't change your mind.
I go through graves.
With no angels.
Smiles upon faces,
and loaded guns
Needles in my veins
This is, which is
Halos without angels.
Calling out names.
A useless repetition,
without ending
A Haunted expectation.
If you would only listen.
She can't see.
But I can tell.
This acceptance.
This is hell.
I go through graves.
With no angels.
Smiles upon faces,
and loaded guns
Needles in my veins
This is, which is
Halos without angels.
Violent but so innocent
Holding with the sick
Ending ageless bullets
We are heaven
But I am deadly |
Mrs. Lee
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| February 26th, 2007 at 03:25am |
Sensual Violation
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| February 26th, 2007 at 07:45am *hugs*
Cookie it's amazing like everything else you write.
ily |
That.One.Asian.Kid
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 | February 26th, 2007 at 11:05am Wow........
That is so......
Beautiful.
It reminds me of a book I read.
I might cry |
wait_what
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| February 26th, 2007 at 12:47pm You have greatly improved with this song. I really love the first few lines of the refrain: I go through graves.
With no angels.
Smiles upon faces,
and loaded guns
Good imagery and interesting choice worrds to use.
I still think that you should work on imagery and metaphors though... Just to make everything more concise and apt.
Good job.  |
newagecarny
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| February 27th, 2007 at 08:37am Halos without angels
that sounds really nice to me. |
Mrs. Lee
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| February 27th, 2007 at 09:11am 
Thank you guys.  |
