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Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | March 29th, 2007 at 05:48pm Come kiss me rapid in the rain
and we can dance like spring does
in the last face of winter,
when the first shades of green
break gradual through white.
Your sugar-almond eyes were always
meant for kissing, those pursed lips
for loving and every laughter-line
creasing like age for caressing.
And I wonder - do my fingertips
fit their blueprints or do I
leave room for tears to filter through?
There were times when we were watched
from distances and laughed still;
jiving through summer, swaying into
autumn, sitting out winter. But now
there are cliff-faces in your eyes
catching the ocean breeze, crumbling
under the weight and forming jagged
pebble-tears that fall to rubble at your feet.
This is what life has made of a little you and I;
a smudge of collateral damage all frayed at the ends
so that, when I reach for you through silences, I
only touch the seams of something bigger
than these cloud-sized hands can cover.
Come, kiss me rapid in the rain, my sweet.
Let me wash all the precipices from your eyes. |
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 87
Gender: Female
Posts: 5844
 | March 29th, 2007 at 06:27pm God...
That's...
That's absolutely breath-taking...
Excellent imagery, metaphors, flow, and structure.
I'm in love with it. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
 | March 29th, 2007 at 07:39pm The first stanza had a lively bounce to it, or so I thought.
Agreeing with the above post about its awesomeness.  |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | March 30th, 2007 at 02:24am My Name Is Trouble:God...
That's...
That's absolutely breath-taking...
Excellent imagery, metaphors, flow, and structure.
I'm in love with it.
Wow. Thank you so much.
 |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | March 30th, 2007 at 02:24am FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda:The first stanza had a lively bounce to it, or so I thought.
Agreeing with the above post about its awesomeness.
Thank you, sweetheart. I appreciate it. |
PaNcAkEs
Jackass
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 1808
| March 30th, 2007 at 08:17pm breathtakingly beautiful. Awesome imagery.
the third verse i liked the best, it has the most wonderful imagery ever. |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | March 31st, 2007 at 10:24am Aaaaaaaaaaahhh. You know what I think of this already. I'm so envious of your talent, and this is just another example of how jealous I am. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | March 31st, 2007 at 04:37pm Velvet Vice:breathtakingly beautiful. Awesome imagery.
the third verse i liked the best, it has the most wonderful imagery ever.
Thank you so much. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | March 31st, 2007 at 04:41pm Tabby Delany:Aaaaaaaaaaahhh. You know what I think of this already. I'm so envious of your talent, and this is just another example of how jealous I am.
Jealous? With your talent? Not possible.
You out-shine me by miles. |
Zoie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 6370 | March 31st, 2007 at 08:51pm That's incredibly beautiful. I think you're offically my favorite poet. o_o |
The Doctor.
Moderator
Age: 41
Gender: -
Posts: 977 | March 31st, 2007 at 08:54pm Inari;
that was absolutely beautiful. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | April 1st, 2007 at 06:09am Zoie:That's incredibly beautiful. I think you're offically my favorite poet. o_o
Wow.
Thank you just doesn't cover it. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | April 1st, 2007 at 06:09am S h a u n a .:Inari;
that was absolutely beautiful.
And so are you. |
