Zoie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 6370 | March 31st, 2007 at 11:41pm I like it actually. And I think you could be really great at this stuff. I loved the imagry (sp?) you used.
'Dig it up’ he whispers to us.
‘Dig it up’ he whispers to us.
I like this part especially...it kinda adds the creepy effect to your poem...I don't know if thats what you were going for though. |
The Doctor.
Moderator
Age: 41
Gender: -
Posts: 977 | April 1st, 2007 at 12:27am yes it was; thankyou. it means alot. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 37
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | April 1st, 2007 at 06:10am I agree with Zoie. This just serves to show that you could be a great poet with practise.
I love the repetition in the first verse. You made it work really well. |
