Salute To The Sun

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Peter Petrelli
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Peter Petrelli
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161
April 13th, 2007 at 06:22am
I managed to get rid of writers' block. Very Happy At long bloody last.


Breakfast in bed at eight thirty. Saturday morning
sunshine bleeds through the divisions separating
the blinds, broken apart like continental drift. On
the floor lays scattered denim and rough cotton.

My plaid shirt still wrapped around your toes
like snakes in grass; squirming through the
creases, curious. I just love the taste of your
scales against my flesh, in search of orchids.

I made eggs just for you. I cracked them into a
pan of sizzling liquid fat, and watched the whites
mingle like dance partners. I feel the toast crumbs
perish into the mattress, grazing against my skin.

And I love to lick the dribbling yolk from around
your lips, bright like Navajo colour. The yellowing
stain upon my quilt holds the scent of your cologne.
At least, until I need to push it into the washing machine.
PONED
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April 14th, 2007 at 04:22pm
i liked it. i liked the ending. i thought it was kinda funny

At least, until I need to push it into the washing machine.
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Peter Petrelli
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April 17th, 2007 at 02:38pm
Thanks. Very Happy
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD
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April 21st, 2007 at 09:34am
Wow... I really like this.

You always have an amazing way for wording your poetry, and your imagery is amazing. You're extremely good, my dear. I loved this a lot.

sunshine bleeds through the divisions separating
the blinds, broken apart like continental drift. On
the floor lays scattered denim and rough cotton.

My plaid shirt still wrapped around your toes
like snakes in grass; squirming through the
creases, curious. I just love the taste of your
scales against my flesh, in search of orchids.


Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.
The Doctor
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April 21st, 2007 at 02:43pm
I love you, y'know that?

This has...everything.

It's simple and true love. Sleepy morning wake-up call. How romance should be.

Yet it scratches so delicately on the surreal.
PaNcAkEs
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April 22nd, 2007 at 02:36pm
its very ... i dno, dont know any words that could describe the imagery... Its wonderful! its a fact aslong as you're the writer behind such lines. I liked the last verse alot too.. especially the last two lines.
wait_what
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April 22nd, 2007 at 03:20pm
Saturday morning
sunshine bleeds through the divisions separating
the blinds, broken apart like continental drift.


That part was absolutely amazing. I love it, although the bit about the yolk kind of grossed me out... but that's just me.
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Peter Petrelli
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161
April 23rd, 2007 at 11:26am
Thanks everyone. I love you aaaaaall. Very Happy
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