Did You...?

Did you see your life flash before your eyes?
Did you even write your goodbyes?

Did you cry when the crash hit you hard?
Did you want to pick out your prayer card?

Were you prepard for the deadly kill?
Did you finish writing out your will?

Did you think this crash was a mistake?
Do you know who is going to your wake?

Did you think that you're life would be saved?
Where do you think we should put uo're grave?

Did you see a big white light?
And you weren't mad at anyone...right?

Did you see an angel by your side?
Did you find that place you want to hide?

You're not ready...are you?
Did you do what you had to?

No. didn't think so
It's not your time to go

Should you want to end your life?
Live...then take a knife?

I don't think you should be dead
Just in a hospital bed...

Because...Did You?

this one sucks so bad

naah, i think its good. The ending should perhaps use a little work, and some lines were kinda cliché but nobody was born perfect and you can work on it and make it better. It wasnt needlessly said that practice makes perfect, its true.

It's not too horrible. I think it has some potential if you go back and revise it a bit. You seem to jump a round a bit to make the ryhmes fit right. Maybe some time you could try writing poetry without rhymes. Throw a bit more imagery and metaphorical language in, and you'll do fine.

okay thanks

no its really good!
its like a mystery in a sort of way....i mean i want ot know the answers to some of the questions (if that makes sense)
it builds a suspense....(THERES THE WORD!)
and the end is very hearttrending
i love it!

thanks!