With out you, my world is blue

Oh please, baby please don't let me cry
Oh baby please don't say goodbye

Your love is so true,
With out you, my world is so blue

I never liked to se you go
But everytime you do, those winds start to blow

Along with that, a storm starts to brew
No one but you can fill that space in my heart, not even my crew

Oh how I love you to sing that song
No matter what you always came along

I cry every night for you to come home

And when I see your car pull up in my driveway
I yell and scream for my pain has gone away

I run into your arms and cry
And you say "I can never say goodbye"

Cause with our love so true
Without you my world is blue


As we stroll along at night
We never think to pitch a fight

Hand in hand at a slow, steady pace
You bring me to a wonderful place

And you say those special words again

Cause with our love so true
Without you my world in blue

the rhyming seems abit forced in some places, and almost everything was abit cliché, try being more discriptive, but its good.

i agree with Tasteful and Sublime, plus, i kinda got a little lost,,not as much as your other poem tho so you are improving

eh not bad ,Dear
rhyming rhythym was WAY off at points..i also got lost a bit, agreeing with Candlelight Chaos.
It was cliche and didn't express feeling at all
And I also didn't like the fact that you say "crew"
I know you mean your friends. When you say that, it makes it seem that they are working for you.. I doesn't make sense
Keep Trying. You are improving though