so i may be a little Emo. so?

You're like a Razor in my Skin
Cutting me with every breath
I'm slowly dieing
Do you even care?

I'd rather die then suffer more heart-break
You're entering my sleepfelt ache
You've got me checking
My vital signs
No, I'm still alive.

Looking in my mirror
My tears drop in the sink
Ruby Red tears
Running down my cheek
Does this make you feel good?

Now it's my turn
I sharpen my knife
and start to hack
at the once wonderful bond
Physical pain can't hurt
I feel wonderfull
It won't happen again.


Poetic Licence. no rhyme scheme. don't comment on capitalization. i'm just glad to get it up. thanks! =]

i think its quite alright.
But it wasnt too unique, i think you could do better.
But its still good.

i agree with Tasteful and Sublime
It wasn't anything special
But it was still pretty good. Good Job