lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
  | May 22nd, 2007 at 03:29am Beggarmaid
I swear I'm not cruel,
That if I could
I would do
Anything for you.
I'm sorry, little boy.
I'm sorry.
It breaks my heart.
It makes me afraid.
I can't help but turn away,
Close the door on your face,
Run away.
I'm sorry, old crone.
I'm sorry.
This fear
Makes me feel
Incompetent. |
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Gender: Female
Posts: 182
| May 22nd, 2007 at 09:40am *incompetent i believe is the right spelling, but im apparently partly dyslexic so i could be wrong....o_o
as for the poem its self....short, but deep =]
it makes me feel kinda sad, cause ive never been in that situation, but ive been in the place of the person theyre apologising to. kinda sheds a new light?
*likes* |
The Doctor
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 8786
| May 22nd, 2007 at 12:18pm It looks good to me. 
Anyway, so much said in such small words. Terrfic use of the repitition and use of crone. |
PaNcAkEs
Jackass
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Gender: Female
Posts: 1808
| May 25th, 2007 at 04:04am aah, here we go again with the "less is more" and " simplicity is bliss"... both are 100% true when it comes to this here. I loved the wording. Great work. |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278
| May 25th, 2007 at 04:48am 
Thank you all. |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | May 27th, 2007 at 06:22am Oh, I really like this. I thought how you kept it short and sharp really added to the apologetic message you were making. Awesome. |
