ros;
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 32 | June 23rd, 2007 at 08:59am Slow traffic;
a vehicle induced slow jazz.
Inching forward to the rhythm of stalling engines,
we are directed by green red strobe lights and
fueled by hackled white collars.
Striped tar leads to the root of the mystery,
the gramophone, the orchestrator;
man or man-made instigator.
We hold our breaths as we approach the
elusive conductor,
meters ticking their constancy assuring surety.
Craned necks and slack-jawed curiosity
punctuate the metal symmetry.
Conductor exposed:
A quadruple man team, a weighty cabby.
Four counts of faded red dye, black shirts,
tight pants and slippers,
single count of bald-headed tension,
retribution, and contrition.
Tell tale wet puddle on the ground,
shattered glass, sneaky cop man presence.
I was jarred by the rawness of the end, the simplicity of the
man and man-made instigator.
Stripped down by traffic's music, bullied by dancers' eyes,
made insignificant by the presence of fear, men become
boys and boys become nothing,
both fading into small print footnotes at the end of the score. |
PONED
Geek
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 257 | June 23rd, 2007 at 05:06pm I can only sum this up in one word
WOW
This is truly amazing. The Imagery was just...great and your way with words is just...wow
Great Job |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | June 24th, 2007 at 06:48am I haven't read your work for a while (probably because I'm never around myself...), but this is exactly why I missed it; I love how you play with ordinary images and trun them into something so intelligent and conceptual. |
Inari
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2538 | June 25th, 2007 at 03:39pm Wow. |
ros;
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 32 | July 2nd, 2007 at 11:49am Thank you all =D |
