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Age: 32
Gender: Female
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Mibba Blog
August 30th, 2007 at 06:12pm
With those pretty brown eyes
And that silly-sweet smile
Of course you'd smile back,
say good morning, but I'd be careful.
She'll kill you in your sleep.

Hasn't anyone ever told you?
They're scariest when
They glow with innocence.
Wide-eyed pleasance and
A wholesome presence--
Don't be fooled.
She'll kill you in your sleep.

You'd never imagine with the way she skips
Arms swinging at her sides while she whistles.
You'd never imagine the things she can do
The way she leaves them all twisted
Hair tangled, limbs torn.
No one ever thinks that those dimpled cheeks
Would be the ones to kill you in your sleep.

So when she goes right past
And grins head tilted to the side
And they all pat her on the head
"Sweet Lizzie," they say.
"Sweet Lizzie," you think.
Just take it all up
That suicidal venom you drink.
'Cause that black-hole heart of hers
Its not too deep, its just enough
To kill you in your sleep.

Teachers and parents,
While you're wishing her well
Try and realize
She's the girl from hell.
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Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 23279
September 2nd, 2007 at 06:23am
Just take it all up
That suicidal venom you drink.
I really liked that part.
Tbh I've read poems of yours I liked a lot better, but this one was still really good.
Good to say out loud...
I did notice that you started rhyming a lot more toward the end of the poem...I have to say, reading it out loud I liked the first two stanzas the best,
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