LaughingToLeave
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Age: 34
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 | September 8th, 2007 at 04:22pm Please let me die, in your arms to forget the past
My eyes to shut tight and believe in every your lie
Every word to follow me to the end
When I sink and fall down would you cry
Like the first day when i met you
When you were faded away and low down
Plastered face that reflect's the youth
Would you leave a tear to show the truth
And if I die, would you carry on
Would you stay awake while I fade to black
We're just a wind that blows through a wall
If we fail there's no way back
Until I die, please stay with me
Take my hand and bid to breathe
In your eyes let me sleep
Take us high and make me feel
But...
Merging in front of my eyes
To kill the beauty and what's inside
I crave not to be seen or heard in awhile
Unitl my soul fades and my mind dies
I'll love you forever
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so, what you think??? |
newagecarny
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Age: 32
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| September 12th, 2007 at 10:43pm I hope you know that it takes one hell of a writer to choose this topic and make it good. It's so completely overused.
However, when I do decide to read a poem like this, I always hope deep inside that a person will add just the tiniest spark of originality to spice it up a bit. And unfortunately, I see none.
The reader eventually loses interest because they've read so many poems like this, they already know the pattern. |
LaughingToLeave
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Age: 34
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| September 14th, 2007 at 04:41pm um...thanx |
