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Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
 | July 17th, 2007 at 09:00pm My Hate And Sorrow
The Pain Is Overwhelming
I Won't Be Here Tomorrow
I'm Dying Now
I Wish You Were Here
To Hold Me In Your Arms
Tell Me It's Alright
I'm Better When You're There
I Wish I Could Talk To You One More Time
I'm Getting Lightheaded Now
The Blood Keeps Coming
Like Waterfalls Flowing Down My Arms
The Love I Had For You
It Won't Go Away
I Think I See You Next To Me
Take My Hand In Yours
Kiss Me One Last Time
I'm Letting Go
I'm On The Floor Now
In A Lake Of My own Blood
It Keeps Coming
My Breath Is Getting Shallow
The Blood Is Filling My Mouth
I'm Slipping Away
Everything Is Black Now
I Can't See
I'm Covered In Blood
Make Sure Everyone Knows
I Love Them
Tears Mixed With Blood
All The Things You Have Said
For You To Live
Is My Dying Wish
I'm Dead... |
C.j. Hardcore Pansy
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 97
 | July 22nd, 2007 at 10:02pm wow...amazing...deep...emotional..wow...I LOVED IT!! |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| July 29th, 2007 at 10:24pm Thank you
You were the only one that replied |
syco-cheechoo2
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 98
| July 30th, 2007 at 05:10pm That is really good. You captured emotion very well. It was really deep as I could see. You did a good job. |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| July 30th, 2007 at 10:41pm Aww shucks 
Thank you |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| July 31st, 2007 at 10:28pm Any one else? |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 3rd, 2007 at 09:39pm Any one? |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 5th, 2007 at 07:24am The last paragraph was actually inspired from something a good friend of mine told me. |
ASTHMATIC RUNNER
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 3 | August 7th, 2007 at 11:27pm that is AMAZING it made me tear up |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 8th, 2007 at 01:52am Really?
That's kewl
Thank you  |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 8th, 2007 at 07:44am Any one else? |
Squid.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 2940
| August 8th, 2007 at 08:14am it is good....i like to writ to....i have one that is sorta like that called Xnader...(he was my dog....he was all i cared for in life then some one murdered him....and the las time i ever saw him he was vomiting up his own blood i'll share it with you if you would like to hear it) |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 8th, 2007 at 08:48am Aww I'm sorry *hugs*
Sure if you want to tell me about it
Thanks btw |
Dead End Girl
Addict
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 10219 | August 8th, 2007 at 08:55pm It's kinda of like an endless string of cliches to me.
It doesn't really have much originality to it.
There's a ton of poems with blood and sadness and suicide in it.
What you need to do, if you want to write poems about that subject, is to find a way to create new descriptions. Find a way to make it different.
It's especially hard because the visualisations are so overused nowadays. But if you can find a way to do that, I commend you |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 9th, 2007 at 06:39am Alright |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 19th, 2007 at 05:20am That was awesome girl! I miss her too and sometimes feel myself sinking away from the loneliness that's she's left behind. I'm glad you have found a way to help you cope with your loss. Love you sweety!!! MOM
Edit: No I don't have a split personality,
My mom wrote that for me.
The reply,
Not the poem |
bi_bu_ra
Rotting On Here
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 49428
| August 20th, 2007 at 02:24pm You could've written something more original. Dying, blood, kiss, that's just too random.
Try writing about something else, make your poetry interesting, make it different than other GSB poems. Use adjectives and deep thoughts.
EDIT: I just realized that I've written the same damn thing as Kali did.  Sry. |
Social.Introvert
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 30
Gender: Female
Posts: 3363
| August 21st, 2007 at 07:53pm It's okay.
Honestly it isn't about suicide.
When I wrote it, I felt like dying because I missed someone so much. |
seadream70
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 4 | September 27th, 2007 at 12:30am Leave her alone! It's her feelings and she can express them any way that she wants to! If you knew what she was writing about, it would make more sense to you all! |
