My Dying Wish...

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July 17th, 2007 at 09:00pm
My Hate And Sorrow

The Pain Is Overwhelming

I Won't Be Here Tomorrow




I'm Dying Now

I Wish You Were Here

To Hold Me In Your Arms




Tell Me It's Alright

I'm Better When You're There

I Wish I Could Talk To You One More Time




I'm Getting Lightheaded Now

The Blood Keeps Coming

Like Waterfalls Flowing Down My Arms




The Love I Had For You

It Won't Go Away

I Think I See You Next To Me




Take My Hand In Yours

Kiss Me One Last Time

I'm Letting Go




I'm On The Floor Now

In A Lake Of My own Blood

It Keeps Coming




My Breath Is Getting Shallow

The Blood Is Filling My Mouth

I'm Slipping Away




Everything Is Black Now

I Can't See

I'm Covered In Blood




Make Sure Everyone Knows

I Love Them

Tears Mixed With Blood




All The Things You Have Said

For You To Live

Is My Dying Wish



I'm Dead...
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Mibba
July 22nd, 2007 at 10:02pm
wow...amazing...deep...emotional..wow...I LOVED IT!!
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July 29th, 2007 at 10:24pm
Thank you
You were the only one that replied
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July 30th, 2007 at 05:10pm
That is really good. You captured emotion very well. It was really deep as I could see. You did a good job.
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July 30th, 2007 at 10:41pm
Aww shucks Blush

Thank you
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July 31st, 2007 at 10:28pm
Any one else?
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August 3rd, 2007 at 09:39pm
Any one?
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August 5th, 2007 at 07:24am
The last paragraph was actually inspired from something a good friend of mine told me.
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August 7th, 2007 at 11:27pm
that is AMAZING it made me tear up
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August 8th, 2007 at 01:52am
Really?
That's kewl

Thank you Very Happy
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August 8th, 2007 at 07:44am
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August 8th, 2007 at 08:14am
it is good....i like to writ to....i have one that is sorta like that called Xnader...(he was my dog....he was all i cared for in life then some one murdered him....and the las time i ever saw him he was vomiting up his own blood i'll share it with you if you would like to hear it)
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August 8th, 2007 at 08:48am
Aww I'm sorry *hugs*
Sure if you want to tell me about it

Thanks btw
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August 8th, 2007 at 08:55pm
It's kinda of like an endless string of cliches to me.
It doesn't really have much originality to it.
There's a ton of poems with blood and sadness and suicide in it.

What you need to do, if you want to write poems about that subject, is to find a way to create new descriptions. Find a way to make it different.

It's especially hard because the visualisations are so overused nowadays. But if you can find a way to do that, I commend you
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August 9th, 2007 at 06:39am
Alright
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August 19th, 2007 at 05:20am
That was awesome girl! I miss her too and sometimes feel myself sinking away from the loneliness that's she's left behind. I'm glad you have found a way to help you cope with your loss. Love you sweety!!! MOM



Edit: No I don't have a split personality,
My mom wrote that for me.
The reply,
Not the poem
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Mibba
August 20th, 2007 at 02:24pm
You could've written something more original. Dying, blood, kiss, that's just too random.
Try writing about something else, make your poetry interesting, make it different than other GSB poems. Use adjectives and deep thoughts. Very Happy

EDIT: I just realized that I've written the same damn thing as Kali did. Coolio Sry.
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August 21st, 2007 at 07:53pm
It's okay.

Honestly it isn't about suicide.
When I wrote it, I felt like dying because I missed someone so much.
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September 27th, 2007 at 12:30am
Leave her alone! It's her feelings and she can express them any way that she wants to! If you knew what she was writing about, it would make more sense to you all!
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