Rocker Chic
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 2001
 | February 27th, 2008 at 01:45pm The Monster
The monster is here
It's eating at my core
I scream in pain
But I still want more
The monster is here
Yelling in hate
Makes me feel bad
About all my mistakes
The monster is here
Pushing me so hard
Spinning me in circles
Telling me I won't get far
The monster is here
In this dark, moonlit room
I feel so helpless
Like this is my doom
The monster is here
Because that monster is me
Keeping me away
From everything I could be
By Poette
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bi_bu_ra
Rotting On Here
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 49428
 | March 2nd, 2008 at 08:57am I like it, but it's more like a song to me than a poem. I love the story, but I only like rhyming in the first and last verse.
Good job, but could be just a liiiitle better. |
