The End and The Means

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lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
lyrical_mess
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278

Mibba Blog
February 23rd, 2008 at 02:55pm
See, I'm a brat
And I get what I want
With a tantrum
or pandamonium
or silence for days.
Whatever I have
To do or say, I will
I will
I will
Have my way.

See, I've no regrets
About how this works.
With seduction
or persuasion
or driving you insane
Whatever I have
To do or say, I will
I will
I will
Have my way.

See, I want you
And you will be mine.
I will find the key
So don't you fret, treasure.
Desperate times
Call for desperate measures
And I'll scream
And I'll shout
And I'll bleed for days
But I will, I will
I will have my way.


It's kind of irritating, actually. This is the fourth poem I've written about this guy. Or fifth. I'm losing count already.
Arcane-Inamorata
King For A Couple Of Days
Arcane-Inamorata
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 3278

Mibba
February 25th, 2008 at 03:18am
I like it. It really shows the narrators determination and personality. The way you used "I will, I will, I will have my way" was excellent. However, the last stanza kind of... doesn't quite fit rhythmically... I don't really know how to explain it. But I really do enjoy it.
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
lyrical_mess
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 5278

Mibba Blog
March 14th, 2008 at 02:30am
Thank you! Really. Because it means quite a lot when someone appreciates a poem that comes from an actual feeling.
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