wild at heart
Idiot
Age: 28
Gender: Female
Posts: 983
 | March 14th, 2009 at 05:57am Your cold wet body
Slips slowly through my skinny fingers
Just like elusive truth
Slips slowly through my dreamy eyes.
Your thin gentle tentacles
Cause so much harm to my rough skin
Cause wounds to my burning lips,
My hands are bleeding
All over your blind numb eyes.
This is goodbye to purity
This is goodbye to light
I'll go waste my time now
Alone in the night. |
LittleSister
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 5622 | March 16th, 2009 at 11:50am i like the last stanza and how its rhyming makes a contrast to the first and the second one. however, the phrase 'your thin gentle tentacles' is so grotesque that it ruins the atmosphere of the poem |
