my Poem..... that doesnt rhyme.
u cant stop me from walking off a cliff, u cant stop me from jumping in front of a bus, u cant stop me from drinking poison, u cant stop me from fucking up my life, u cant stop me from jumping off a building, u cant stop me from slitting my throat, u cant stop me from telling u its over.... u cant stop me, u cant stop me, u cant stop me until its too late.
lol haha ur so write..... i have written way better stuff.... but i was feeling a little morbid...
Mezza_Wh, April 4th, 2007 at 06:27:40am
1. Poems doesn't have to rhyme.
2. THAT isn't a poem. It's just a line of sentences... Not even sentences... there's not any proper punctuation.
3. If it is poetry, it's terrible. Its horribly blunt and just not poetic in the least bit. Plus, the last part doesn't make any sense. The person can't stop you... until it's too late? If it's too late, they can't stop you anyway. Perhaps "because" would have been a better word.
wait_what, April 3rd, 2007 at 05:13:58pm