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Geek
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  | June 21st, 2006 at 01:01pm Aww! It's so pretty! Amazing. I love the last stanza. Quite touching. |
I Am So Beautiful! FUCK!
Jackass
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| June 22nd, 2006 at 01:46pm *Applauds* That was brilliant. I really loved it. It was.. just so good. =D I think I also might become a fan of your poetry. |
whatwasithinking
Geek
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Gender: Female
Posts: 130
| June 24th, 2006 at 12:24pm Yeah you kinda killed it with the last line. It was delicate almost and then bam. |
Jay Tee
Had A Life Before GSB
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Posts: 26777
| June 24th, 2006 at 12:25pm AutoPilot-SkyTower:Yeah you kinda killed it with the last line. It was delicate almost and then bam.
I agree with this. Maybe you should've finished with something like:
"In your own beautiful way" |
Comic tragedy
Idiot
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Posts: 546 | June 24th, 2006 at 12:35pm Lovely. |
Ol' Blue Eyes.
King For A Couple Of Days
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| June 24th, 2006 at 03:27pm 409 Coffeemaker:AutoPilot-SkyTower:Yeah you kinda killed it with the last line. It was delicate almost and then bam.
I agree with this. Maybe you should've finished with something like:
"In your own beautiful way"
It seemed to flow, when I was writing it. I didn't realize the swear would mess things up so much. |
Miley Cyrus
Basket Case
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 15185
| June 24th, 2006 at 03:35pm Not that I could write any better, but i thought it was alright.
Before I read Inari and Eliana Rampage's poems I would have thought it was amazing, but I've just been too awed to like anything not up to their standard. |
