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 | July 15th, 2006 at 12:51am I had a dream one night. Within the dream I was speaking to you and I asked of you,” If you had one chance, just one chance to see me, when would you want to see me?”
You think to yourself for a moment and you respond,” Now, I cannot bear to wait any longer.”
I grin to myself and say sarcastically,” I wonder who that could be.”
You ask me confusedly,” Who?”
But you stop and hear knock at your front door. You think quietly to yourself, heart beating fast, how did he know? A crazy thought streaks through your head and you run to the front door. You open the door and see me standing there smiling. Even though I was smiling a tear falls slowly down my face. You ask me, with tears rolling down your face,” Why are you crying?”
I gave the reply,” You are even more beautiful than in my dreams.”
You hug me with such love I couldn’t forget.
My dream then takes us to a beautiful beach nowhere near where we live. You had your head upon my shoulder and I am gently caressing your arm. As I was caressing your arm I touched your wrist…I felt all the times when you were alone and no one was there, all the times when the pain was to much, all the times when love was not present in your heart.
I hug you and whisper softly in your ear,” I’ll never let you go…”
MW |
Tahm York
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| July 15th, 2006 at 01:16am it wasn't that great..
it didn't suck though |
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Posts: 14139 | July 16th, 2006 at 12:06am more of a story than a poem, but i can see how it can be structured as a poem. very original structure. 6/10 |
