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Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | August 15th, 2006 at 01:59am Her screams are silent
Piercing my ears
Her screams are fatal
Blood in my ears
Reaching out blindly
Grasp onto air
Her voice is a blur
It's cold in here
Memories haunt me
A shadow of hate
The silent moon
Foreshadow of Fate
A murder, a death
You're going to Hell
Look in the mirror
You'll understand well |
billiejoeblowjob
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42 | August 15th, 2006 at 02:12am the ending was haunting but i didn't get why you used it. still.... sounds like an internal battle to me, that he hurt his gf-- raped someone?--- and now he feels bad when he sees himself/ is reminded what he did. 
(could be wrong though.....) |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | August 15th, 2006 at 02:14am billiejoeblowjob:the ending was haunting but i didn't get why you used it. still.... sounds like an internal battle to me, that he hurt his gf-- raped someone?--- and now he feels bad when he sees himself/ is reminded what he did.
(could be wrong though.....)
No. She killed herself. |
billiejoeblowjob
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42 | August 15th, 2006 at 02:16am Santa Billie:billiejoeblowjob:the ending was haunting but i didn't get why you used it. still.... sounds like an internal battle to me, that he hurt his gf-- raped someone?--- and now he feels bad when he sees himself/ is reminded what he did.
(could be wrong though.....)
No. She killed herself.
*hangs head* damn.
well.... just a question but who's the narrator then? (just a narrator, a bf, a parent, etc.....) |
Santa Billie
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 8285 | August 15th, 2006 at 02:17am billiejoeblowjob:Santa Billie:billiejoeblowjob:the ending was haunting but i didn't get why you used it. still.... sounds like an internal battle to me, that he hurt his gf-- raped someone?--- and now he feels bad when he sees himself/ is reminded what he did.
(could be wrong though.....)
No. She killed herself.
*hangs head* damn.
well.... just a question but who's the narrator then? (just a narrator, a bf, a parent, etc.....)
The narrator is a girl.
She kills herself.
She refers to herself in the third person P.O.V. because she is dead. |
billiejoeblowjob
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42 | August 15th, 2006 at 02:48am Santa Billie:billiejoeblowjob:Santa Billie:billiejoeblowjob:the ending was haunting but i didn't get why you used it. still.... sounds like an internal battle to me, that he hurt his gf-- raped someone?--- and now he feels bad when he sees himself/ is reminded what he did.
(could be wrong though.....)
No. She killed herself.
*hangs head* damn.
well.... just a question but who's the narrator then? (just a narrator, a bf, a parent, etc.....)
The narrator is a girl.
She kills herself.
She refers to herself in the third person P.O.V. because she is dead.
*nods* Ahh..... well now it all makes sense. ^_^ |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | August 15th, 2006 at 05:53am Pretty good.
I loved this part;
Memories haunt me
A shadow of hate
The silent moon
Foreshadow of Fate |
threeam.
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 350 | August 16th, 2006 at 03:49am that sent shivers down my spine.. |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | August 17th, 2006 at 12:49pm i loved it |
