iNTHENAMEOFMiSERY.
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 41 | November 2nd, 2006 at 08:39pm She opens up her eyes again,
and notices the moon shining bright through her window.
Her eyes are dark
her wrists are bruised;
what the hell did she have to lose?
its the middle of the night,
she turns on the bedroom light
to see the mirror across the room.
she gets up to see the stereotypical point of view
that people see every day.
black hair with bright blue eyes
unwashed eyeliner on her face.
wow.
she realizes: this is me.
i ignore the stereotypes
and be my own person.
she goes to her window
and feels a sudden urge to just scream.
get all the emotion out.
she opened her mouth and nothing came out.
a slow tear dribbled down her cheek again
as she realizes the civilization of today.
she hears a chant :
Nobody likes you,
everyone left you,
they're all out without you,
having fun.
being of this breed of teens has picked her up,
but then slammed her down on the ground.
she is misunderstood.
she is teased.
she is tortured.
she is one of us.
she is punk.[/quote] |
iNTHENAMEOFMiSERY.
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 41 | November 2nd, 2006 at 08:42pm sorry guys, it doesnt rhyme....
hehe read! |
iNTHENAMEOFMiSERY.
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 41 | November 3rd, 2006 at 12:17pm um, comments anyone? |
What's in a name?
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 2451
 | November 3rd, 2006 at 01:12pm Well here is what you should know
1.Poems are preferably written in stanzas. Do that.
2.Begin a sentence with a capital letter. Always.
3.Do not take something from other poems (or lyrics or any text)
4.Make the poem flow.
5.Use metaphors, grand words or poetic wording.
6.Don’t make the poem so repetitive
7.Be careful with labels (especially “punk”)
8.Keep to the chosen subject, don’t go astray and don’t mix different themes.
I guess that would be a start, yeah. Good luck and I’ll give you more help and tips as you move along. |
