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Mibba
November 28th, 2006 at 04:10pm
Here you can get help if you get writers block. Fizz

Since you can’t post unfinished poems on the board this thread exists. Here you can post what you’ve got so far to get help.

Of course you can't post finished poems here Wink

Good luck!
Peter Petrelli
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November 29th, 2006 at 02:52pm
Hmmmm. Sounds like a good idea. And it certainly solves the problem of posting unfinished poems on the board.
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November 29th, 2006 at 03:37pm
... how can you help someone with writer block. hm.
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November 29th, 2006 at 06:46pm
^ I'm having the same problem..kind of.

I have writer's block, but when I do write, I've been feeling like it's all cliche and redundant. Not too mention mundane. How can I make my poetry something unique, without just repeated what everyone else does?
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Mibba
November 29th, 2006 at 09:08pm
Awesome....I have an unfinished poem that I would like to be completed -ahem-

These pass few years have been fun
But now your lies have come undone
My regrets are shinning through
And all this pain started with you


How's that? It's not good but it's not great....at least that's what I think. And I want to finish it, but I don't know what else to put....
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Mibba
November 30th, 2006 at 04:18am
Misanthropist:
^ I'm having the same problem..kind of.

I have writer's block, but when I do write, I've been feeling like it's all cliche and redundant. Not too mention mundane. How can I make my poetry something unique, without just repeated what everyone else does?

Try to just write without thinking of how it looks, sounds or turns out. That might help. Or you could write in a completely different way from what you usually write.

Other ways to go is just to let poetry rest altogether for a while. Meanwhile you could begin on stories, write diary entries and/or make parts of theatre manuscripts (so that your writing skills don’t get rusty).

Personally I find that listening to new music or reading new poems (not GSB poems) help a lot.

I hope this can help you as well. Very Happy
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Mibba
November 30th, 2006 at 04:51am
Desperate for attention:
Awesome....I have an unfinished poem that I would like to be completed -ahem-

These pass few years have been fun
But now your lies have come undone
My regrets are shinning through
And all this pain started with you


How's that? It's not good but it's not great....at least that's what I think. And I want to finish it, but I don't know what else to put....

Fizz

It’s a very common kind of poetry with its short rows, lack of punctuation, AABB rhyming and very simple vocabulary. If you in spite of that want to complete it then I suggest that you use this site as a help. Because one of the problems with rhymes is that it can be very restricting. Often they are forced to make the poem move along.

To continue the poem you can 1) put it aside and try to find inspiration through other peoples poems (or any kind of written work) or 2) think about what story you want to tell (what you wan to say with your poem) and/or what feeling you want to communicate to the reader.

Hopefully you began writing for a reason and if you can pin point that and stick to it you might be able to finish your poem.

Otherwise my suggestion is that you give up on this poem and drop by at the “Poetry Tips 2” thread and read the tips there Wink

Good luck! ^_^
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December 1st, 2006 at 12:09pm
Argh... I can't seem to write anything. All I can get is drabbles of mediochre drips of poetic slag from some furnace of pure poetical genious.

;_;
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Mibba
December 1st, 2006 at 12:44pm
[Joan] Polemic Epidemic:
Argh... I can't seem to write anything. All I can get is drabbles of mediochre drips of poetic slag from some furnace of pure poetical genious.

;_;
Music and jumping jacks, I tell you. Works every time. Wink
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December 1st, 2006 at 08:48pm
I have the worst writer's block.
DX

And I do write all the time: stories, journals, and I get ideas in my head, but I never remember them long enough to get them down on paper.

I hate not being able to write. ;___;
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December 1st, 2006 at 09:00pm
°MorbidRose°:
I have the worst writer's block.
DX

And I do write all the time: stories, journals, and I get ideas in my head, but I never remember them long enough to get them down on paper.

I hate not being able to write. ;___;


That happens to me frequently. But I don't forget them. They just simply don't come out.

You can read someone elses' works in order to become inspired. It helps me alot.
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December 1st, 2006 at 09:03pm
A Melancholy Winter:
°MorbidRose°:
I have the worst writer's block.
DX

And I do write all the time: stories, journals, and I get ideas in my head, but I never remember them long enough to get them down on paper.

I hate not being able to write. ;___;


That happens to me frequently. But I don't forget them. They just simply don't come out.

You can read someone elses' works in order to become inspired. It helps me alot.
Thanks.
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The Doctor
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December 15th, 2006 at 02:09pm
Hmm...Think

A few bits and pieces...

Roses of mould blooming
in the frosty, dormant garden
of Hell.


What is this cloud of smoke
in front of me?
Dragon's sly breath circling tauntingly

A heartbeat
I hear a heart beat,
not mine, not mine
my ticking halted long ago.
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Mibba
December 17th, 2006 at 04:14am
As she looks into the mirror
Facing the last person she wanna see
She’s trading her fears for drugs and fascination
Keeping her head raised high and love away from her heart
Keeping her head over water
Trying not to sink, sink deep down
Further down and down
Until the bottom hits
And crash…


=]
I think it's a little short
*pokes poem*
But I also think I made it seem like as if it was finished there Cheese Like, as if it was hard to continue after the crash... Confused I suck XD
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Mibba
December 19th, 2006 at 10:44am
To Joan of Arc: Writers block? Are you stuck? Perhaps you just need to put it aside for a while and continue later. That’s one thing I do quite frequently and it works real well (at least for me). Very Happy

I Kiss Girls [[Faggot]]:

=]
I think it's a little short
*pokes poem*
But I also think I made it seem like as if it was finished there Cheese Like, as if it was hard to continue after the crash... Confused I suck XD

Yeah, it is perhaps a little short Smile

Nah, it’s not that hard. You know this movies and stories that start with the ending? You can do something like that. Keep this first stanza in italics and write the rest in regular text (or whatever it should be called xD). Then you just come back to the crash in the last stanza. Or you could write about what happens after the crash, either that or you can add verses explaining what happened before (and put the stanza you have as the last one in your poem).

You might want to use punctuation too.

Hope that helps. Good luck! Up
Milk
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December 26th, 2006 at 11:19pm
Oh, um... I have an unfinished poem here, that I need help with.
It's called deadbeat, and it's about my uncle who has a drug
problem, he is in debt to everyone, and has to leave town. He buys
and sells crystal meth, crack and heroin. I guess this is how I feel,
but I need help finishing it.

Deadbeat
High up on your web
Of 'intricate' lies
You're stuck there waiting
For your hope to rise

When you stop snorting
(deadbeat)
When you're done extorting
(deadbeat)
When you fill your empty soul
Come back to the winnning team

It's not like we can't see it
You really try to hard
You're an effortless addict
Who's left everyone scarred

And that's it, I can't really think of the last verse I need.
=S I think it's not a poem but a song, sort of.
It's really confusing me now Cheese
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December 26th, 2006 at 11:37pm
Milk:
And that's it, I can't really think of the last verse I need.
=S I think it's not a poem but a song, sort of.
It's really confusing me now Cheese
I wouldn't rush it.
It takes me weeks to sometimes finish songs.
I have verses and choruses just lying about.

If it's really annoying you, I'd take a break for a while.
It'll come to you Up
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December 30th, 2006 at 02:05pm
Do you think length is a big issue with poems? I just wrote a poem I'm not sure about and it's rather long, but people tell me it's fine.
I still don't know.
The Doctor
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December 30th, 2006 at 02:15pm
Misanthropist:
Do you think length is a big issue with poems? I just wrote a poem I'm not sure about and it's rather long, but people tell me it's fine.
I still don't know.
A poem can be as long or as short as you like.

T.S. Elliot had a poem that was amde into a book because it was so long. Faith
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January 2nd, 2007 at 01:58pm
Gah...help!

I hate this...

The world is incredibly imaginary
The lies seem to be so ordinary
All of my simplistic queries
are passed off as crackpot theories.

Where are my lords of anarchy and disorder?
They've been betrayed by a wire recorder.

Now the time has passed by
and so the previous battle cry
that they all feared and despised
has been so utterly sensationalized
It's a one hit wonder.
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