My poems.

Why I am who I am

If im not me then who could I be
A falling soul without life’s key
Im forced to fake a smile a laugh a false sense of security
When all I want is to be free
If this is life Then life isn’t all its cracked up to be..

A shadow of doubt amongst the rest
Turn a good day into the scarlet rage that is suppressed
Giving me one of life’s hardest tests
If only I had the strength to protest
Life’s turbulent troubles uneasy, unrest

Being alone isn’t so bad when you can make that change
I have targets like the shots of bullets from a firing range
Yet they seem so hard to accomplish, arrange
The life of mine for yours? Hell I would exchange
I don’t belong here I need a change

I need to break free I need to be me…
im false im fake hideing behind my fears of opaque
don’t let me break, unfold this is me no hideing no suppressions behold…

I hide cause I fear not to
I live cause I need to
Im me cause that’s who I was born to be….

MOTHER

When I look into the mirror and see the lies

And see me slowly slip into the skin that I idolize

When I begin to feel it doesn't fit anymore

Yet my mother is still the one I adore

With a smile and her open arms who could want more

Although I still feel something is missing

Why so much anger, complaining please stop you’re hissing

And out of love your white lies are sweet

Like a spoonful of sugar coated deceit

But quit your greed your moans, take a seat

Mother I have had enough

Please don’t be so tough

I know things aren’t so great for you

But you adopted us from new

Our past wound still hurt and are raw..

But mother, I love you your still the one I adore!

MOTHER EARTH

tonight is one so quiet
no sound no word no riot
other earth herself has put to sleep
no swollows rule the skys to sweep
the skys at night as cold as rain
nobody near to feel my pain
and as the night unwines and wakes
what comforting noises mother earth can make
for once so quite and undisturbed
it seems that now she will be heard
possibly the best creation life dose hold
and all the wounders of the world unfold
as simple as a bee buzzing by
or as the butter flys and birds that fly
this place is bound to me as i am of it
every day draws by and all my answers do knit
as mother earth she rules us all
love her dearly and that is my call

If I where a pen you could be my paper
So I could write your name over and over
If I was music I would be your song
One that would lift you higher then King Kong

I drink to ease the pain
To stop that pulse that thunder in my veins
I cry to soften and forget what’s past
As if I knew that wouldn’t last
Life’s a pitt and so is my perception of it

If I where a bird I would be a crow
Myseterious with a lack sheet of secrets hording them to overflow
If I where a flower I would be a poppy
With outer colour of camouflage but inside are heavy black stones an image no one can copy

I drink to ease the pain
To stop that pulse that thunder in my veins
I cry to soften and forget what’s past
As if I knew that wouldn’t last
Life’s a pitt and so is my perception of it

Im not too good at wrighting but it helps to let me understand what im feeling and also itsa good releif. like a weight has been lifted off my shoulders.

so ya.. lol
not even sure why i posted them here.

any comments or suggestions appriciated.

Wow. That's... wow. Erm, wow.

I may need some time with a dictionary here. There has to be a better word than wow. That's really good!

The SquirrelMeister:

Wow. That's... wow. Erm, wow.

I may need some time with a dictionary here. There has to be a better word than wow. That's really good!

agreed. i can't think of any adjectives. the poems are amazing!

ha ha kewl thanks..
i just re read them and noticed a few mistakes but you get the idea WOW! thanks guys?
are there any downfalls in them? apart from the minor mistakes?

Wow. I didn't know you were into poetry. You have a neat style. I think in some places, you may overdo the rhyme just a little bit to much, but really those are some of the best A,A,B,B styled poems I have read in awhile. The first one especially. Have you ever tried free verse? Your vocabulary can certainly support it.

"If only I had the strength to protest
Life’s turbulent troubles uneasy, unrest"
Those two lines are amazing, I really like them. especially the beat of them.

thanks
i have tried free verse when i was back at school but i didnt really like the style i didnt see the point in it to be honest.
but thanks im glad you guys like them

thanks to be honest the first one isnt my fav though Mother is prob my fav.. and i dont really know why i have a few others too that i might post sometime.

Low self esteem? You’re pretty good at writing poetry actually. You might wanna proofread and edit your poems next time though, there’s quite a few typos you’ve got there. Also, some sort of punctuation wouldn’t hurt . I think you rhyme very well. You shouldn’t give up on it, just practise more. You have a simple stile when it comes to your choice of words and similes but your wording is great. You have a poetic writing stile so to say. But try to watch the flow, it tends to get a tad off. Like in these lines:
“If I where a flower I would be a poppy
With outer colour of camouflage but inside are heavy black stones an image no one can copy”
That’s the problem with rhyming poems; they’re more restricting. Oh, and next time, why not make a topic for each of your poems instead of posting them all in the same one? Just don’t post more than three poems at a time.

What's in a name?:

Low self esteem? You’re pretty good at writing poetry actually. You might wanna proofread and edit your poems next time though, there’s quite a few typos you’ve got there. Also, some sort of punctuation wouldn’t hurt . I think you rhyme very well. You shouldn’t give up on it, just practise more. You have a simple stile when it comes to your choice of words and similes but your wording is great. You have a poetic writing stile so to say. But try to watch the flow, it tends to get a tad off. Like in these lines:
“If I where a flower I would be a poppy
With outer colour of camouflage but inside are heavy black stones an image no one can copy”
That’s the problem with rhyming poems; they’re more restricting. Oh, and next time, why not make a topic for each of your poems instead of posting them all in the same one? Just don’t post more than three poems at a time.

okay yea lol sorry.. im so lazy when im online i never really use punctuation but i will next time and yea i noticed the typos after i posted them hehe! (but i have an excuse as you well know hehe! LOL!)
yea i wasnt happy with that poem at all.. it didnt seem to flow as well as the others

thanks for the tips. ill post another soon.