The Taste of Roses

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davey jones.
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Mibba Blog
February 28th, 2007 at 10:20pm
This is short. I revised this from a paragraph I wrote...and it still sucks. But perhaps I can adapt my new ideas into a story other than a rare poem...

The Taste of Roses
Oh how the roses used to taste so sweet;
The edges of their petals an emberous gold
Where lips and tongue meet,
Ubiquitous, those petals that fold,
Like my lover's scent.
Deernt.
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Mibba Blog
February 28th, 2007 at 10:31pm
I like it a lot.
Very descriptive and it's worded almost perfectly.
Five
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Mibba Blog
March 1st, 2007 at 02:09pm
Short and sweet and very good. The last line is absolutely wonderful. Very Happy
davey jones.
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davey jones.
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Mibba Blog
March 1st, 2007 at 10:11pm
Thanks guys. Very Happy
laughingonlyme
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March 1st, 2007 at 10:28pm
I really liked this poem because it was short. It didn't daddle on and on.

For some reason this poem reminds me of feeling lonely.
PaNcAkEs
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Blog
March 2nd, 2007 at 03:17pm
I'm Lizalicious is right, it is perfect
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Jackass
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Mibba
March 2nd, 2007 at 03:23pm
That was pretty beautiful. Nice use of words and such. And interesting rhyme scene.

^_^
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