Revenge;;
Geek
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 270
 | March 1st, 2007 at 05:53pm Okay, I'll accept anything, anybody has to say about this. It is different from what I normaly write, and, I want to know if it is good, or bad,...I know the ending kind of sucks,..but,..I'm still trying to improve it,...I just want to know what everyone else thinks,...
Death Wish
Rain drops on black rose pedals
Converts onto the ground
As the breeze floats by
A single death wish under ones breath
A dark and stormy night
Dark forces of the unknown
Took my beloved lover away
Anatomize the situation
Who would wish for such a crime?
To take my beloved away
I’m anesthesia
They took my life away
With a single death wish
I’m nothing
Desiring revenge…
Wanting revenge…
Who would make such a wish,
Against my beautiful beloved?
Sitting, crying, pondering…
Why death beckon my beloved
Coerce her with her sweet innocence
And left her cold on the ground
Death took her away
And left me here to weep,
Weep in my lonely chambers
Damp and cold
Depressed in all my sanity
Realizing now,
Death made such a wish
He wished for her death
And took her away
And left me here with no reason to stay
So, I’m standing here today
Defying death, challenging death
To come and take my life away
I’m making a death wish for it
Just take me away… |
PaNcAkEs
Jackass
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 1808
 | March 2nd, 2007 at 03:20pm i think its good |
Revenge;;
Geek
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 270
| March 2nd, 2007 at 06:12pm ..Thank-you....<3.... |
Deernt.
Rotting On Here
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 48258
| March 2nd, 2007 at 06:29pm Stupidity:i think its good Why do you think it's good? What did it have that made you think it was good? What parts were good? |
