Deernt. Rotting On Here
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 48258
 | March 26th, 2007 at 08:20pm  Here's one I wrote a while ago.
No thought really put into it. But that's your job to decide that. XD
Crushed Emotions
Augmented anger.
Diminished content.
A minor conspiracy.
A major let down.
Your gestures of generosity;
immediately smeared into oblivion,
All because of my crushed emotions.
No thankful greeting.
No loving mood.
Only built up unhappiness from
...the soul within...
Forced to be apologetic
Reluctant in wanting to please
Nothing changes,
except my crushed emotions.
They'd shatter to countless pieces
but they stay fresh internally.
These emotions are more everyday.
Have a blast.  |
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD Falling In Love With The Board
 Age: 87 Gender: Female Posts: 5844
 | March 29th, 2007 at 02:02pm I liked it.
Though, for me, I found that you used the word "emotions" a little too much.
That's my only camplaint though.
Very good!
Forced to be apologetic
Reluctant in wanting to please
Loved that. |
Deernt. Rotting On Here
 Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 48258
 | March 30th, 2007 at 03:01pm ^Thanks hun.
I agree, I used emotions too much. XD |