Destination_Unknown
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Posts: 105 | June 2nd, 2007 at 08:04pm Baby, you set my heart on fire
All night my mind is full of dreams
Just like a slow and steady stream
I just wished for your lips, to kiss
But I was afraid I'd miss
I sent you a letter across the sea
Actually hoping you'd never see
I just hoped you didnt think I was a liar
So I sailed the sea and my heart was set on fire
A letter you send,"I'll never forget you"
and all I caould do was look at my shoe
I loved you from the start
The moment you stole my very heart
You never thoguht I was a liar
So you set my heart on fire
You never lied, we were on a date
"Hun, for you I'll wait"
I just wished for your lips to kiss
But this time I didn't miss
The storm seemed so strong
So we did it all night long
Baby, you set my heart on fire |
XPitOfDespairX
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 | June 3rd, 2007 at 07:45pm awww thats sweet!
it kinda made me think of pirates of the carribean 3! lol
i dont know how but i guess with the ships and love and whatever
but it was good! |
La Tua Cantante
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 | June 4th, 2007 at 03:53pm yea it made me think of pirates of carribean too! lol
wow
the rhyming pattern was a little forced and there were a few spelling errors, but your poems have improved greatly!
good job! |
PONED
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Posts: 257 | June 8th, 2007 at 08:41pm It was good. I liked it  |
paper heart.
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| June 19th, 2007 at 07:22am hey this is great
yeah i see the link to POTC3 x]
I liked the rhyming couplets, idk if you ment for this effect or not
but they portray the two young souls in love
[[yeah i read waaay too much shakesphere xD]] |
