Garrett Hanlund
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  | June 20th, 2006 at 05:07pm Yeah, so... this is my last poem. I hope you've enjoyed my works, from the angry death poems, to the emo love poems, to the random works of Paranoia. I just can't write anymore, as you will see, I have lost my tallent. It pains me too much to write anymore. Best wishes to the rest of you, you've been a great inspiration and a big part of my life.
It's backwards.
The way we live our lives apart,
and yet love with such intensity.
Sending messages to each other
through our veins and moonlight.
You said I was your angel. Your star.
It's a miracle.
So what happened to that sickness?
It threatened your lungs, dried your throat.
Would have killed your heart, too, but
it was here with me. I am your cancer.
I am that pain that hits your chest.
I am that loss of breath.
It's not alright.
I spend my days alone now.
With that lingering scent of your words.
That feeling of you right behind me,
but you are no where to be found.
I can hear your voice, you're taunting me.
Is it my paranoia, or is it love?
It's a shame.
We commited the perfect crime.
I stole your heart, you stole mine.
You're a backstabbing thief but I'm no better.
I'm a big mistake, you're a mess of piercings and ink.
Just two stupid kids, right?
I didn't think so...
It's a happy ending.
We sit staring at the sky.
Still thousands if miles seperate.
You take a deep breath, exhale.
Look, a falling star.... |
[Your Best Mistake]
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Posts: 551 | June 20th, 2006 at 05:12pm I like it. I really do. Especially the last line. |
The Doctor
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| June 20th, 2006 at 05:16pm NO! You have to keep writing or I will... um... play with dyanamite. Please! You're a very good poet, the flow in this was great to me and the vocab wasn't over done. It's was great so I don't see why you're giving up. |
Garrett Hanlund
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| June 20th, 2006 at 05:17pm Joan of Arc of Suburbia:NO! You have to keep writing or I will... um... play with dyanamite. Please! You're a very good poet, the flow in this was great to me and the vocab wasn't over done. It's was great so I don't see why you're giving up. Because I lost my love to a poem. |
ladyramone
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Posts: 21701 | June 20th, 2006 at 05:20pm you should make your poems into actual songs.
they can really touch people.
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Dead End Girl
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Posts: 10219 | June 20th, 2006 at 05:34pm I thought it all was fantastic.
And you can take the poet out of the poems...
But you can't take the poems out of the poet.
Your writing is to touching to people, I doubt you'll be able to quit for long.
And that hurting?
I've hurt when I've written.
Don't worry about it. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
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| June 20th, 2006 at 07:26pm I love that so much. Think subtly brilliant.
You know you can't quit writing for long. I'm not going to make a ridiculous threat, so I hope you figure that out on your own. And when you do, come back. =] |
*they_call_me Ri*
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Posts: 177 | June 21st, 2006 at 09:19am that was really good!
"It's a shame.
We commited the perfect crime.
I stole your heart, you stole mine.
You're a backstabbing thief but I'm no better."
i love these lines. you really should keep writting. |
Inari
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Posts: 2538 | June 21st, 2006 at 09:24am I really liked that.
Especially the last stanza.
Don't want to push you into carrying on writing if you don't want to, but you do have a lot of talent. |
Meski
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| June 21st, 2006 at 09:29am I like it alot! Congrats |
Ol' Blue Eyes.
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| June 21st, 2006 at 09:38am That was amazing.
I'm sorry you're not going to be writing anymore. Your poems are great. I'll miss them, and you, ma'am. |
snowcherry
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Posts: 3912 | June 21st, 2006 at 11:17am Inari:I really liked that.
Especially the last stanza.
Don't want to push you into carrying on writing if you don't want to, but you do have a lot of talent.
*agrees and nods*
I loved that poem so so much.
I wanna hug it. *hugs it* |
