Dirty Promises and Vicious Verdicts

Board index - Your poetry

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newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	June 20th, 2006 at 11:36am Approval of society is hard to achieve. Let's just call this venting Dirty Promises and Vicious Verdicts The moon flashes Lifting the dust Evidently high. Hopefully I'll drown in your embrace. My river Is lost. There's nowhere to go. I'm an unperfect example of failure. Can you follow? See no evil, hear no evil... So typically equal To everything I feared. Where is my dawn? The labyrinth gets greener. I'm simply a poet Yet I breathe.
rollerpig GSBitch Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 62283	June 20th, 2006 at 11:40am Amazing!
Toxic Teeth Idiot Age: 30 Gender: Female Posts: 645	June 20th, 2006 at 11:40am That was very good! I Like it alot. I liked the part were you said "Im an unperfect example of failure."
Ol' Blue Eyes. King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 4816	June 20th, 2006 at 12:01pm 3rd stanza = love.
Kitti Falling In Love With The Board Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 5688	June 20th, 2006 at 12:29pm I love the Labyrinth allusion, it pretty much blew my mind. One suggestion: don't capitalize each line. Sometimes it works, but with short lines it seemed a little choppy even though the word flow is really good.
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	June 20th, 2006 at 01:06pm I adored the 4th stanza So much. Gorgeous, as always, but I have to agree with Kitti about capitalising.
CrazyEyes Geek Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 112	June 20th, 2006 at 01:10pm Wow, I love it. Especially the 2nd and 3rd stanzas.
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921	June 20th, 2006 at 07:04pm That was amazing. The words you use fit everything. There wasn't even one part of this I didn't like. You're not simply a poet; you're one of the best.
Dehren McGhengland Rotting On Here Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 49206	June 20th, 2006 at 07:14pm That was fantastic. I love it. I love you.
snowcherry King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 3912	June 21st, 2006 at 11:05am Ella: Can you follow? See no evil, hear no evil... So typically equal To everything I feared. Where is my dawn? The labyrinth gets greener. I'm simply a poet Yet I breathe. Loved those two stanzas. But the rest was awsome as well.
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	June 21st, 2006 at 12:04pm Thank you all, you're making me blush.

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