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newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
 | August 7th, 2006 at 09:29am You knew better of distraught.
Yet you continued caressing;
Deliberately guessing
My every thought.
Strangely innocent and kind,
You altered all attraction
Into a chemical reaction.
Darling, I was blind.
I'm just a doll in your collection,
Yet I'm breathing, so it seems.
And even in my troubled dreams
I beg for your affection. |
tomamazon
GSBitch
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 68084
 | August 7th, 2006 at 09:30am O_O
beautiful.
ILIT. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
| August 7th, 2006 at 09:34am OHMYGOODNESSELLA.
Loving the rhyme scheme going on there. As for the actual wordz, brilliante!  |
rollerpig
GSBitch
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 62283 | August 7th, 2006 at 09:35am You're truely talented. O_O
LLLit. |
snowcherry
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 3912 | August 7th, 2006 at 11:54am That was pretty cool.
The rhyming scheme made it sound cute,
even though the meaning isn't.
That's cool. |
11th Street Kid
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3645 | August 7th, 2006 at 12:09pm That's gooooood. |
Love my insanity
Jackass
Age: 93
Gender: Female
Posts: 1591 | August 7th, 2006 at 12:13pm I love it. And the message is really powerful and captivating by the rhyming scheme. |
ancient
Had A Life Before GSB
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Posts: 29697
| August 7th, 2006 at 12:17pm ELLA IT OWNS. k. |
clark
GSBitch
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Posts: 79047 | August 7th, 2006 at 12:34pm It's hard to keep a poem that well written when there's rhyme involved.
Awesome.  |
Peter Petrelli
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4161 | August 7th, 2006 at 01:16pm snowcherry:The rhyming scheme made it sound cute,
even though the meaning isn't.
The contradiction made it all the more darker, which was awesome.  Love it. It's short and sweet without being too short and syrupy. |
Bittersweet World
Banned
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 28301
| August 8th, 2006 at 12:44am Gorgeous.
The rhyming is distraught too and also eerie. I love the way you write Ella. ^__^ |
Orgy
Geek
Age: 34
Gender: -
Posts: 179 | August 8th, 2006 at 04:54pm ur really good at poetry...=]...love it! |
spill_no_sick
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 31
Gender: -
Posts: 8588 | August 8th, 2006 at 06:14pm 200/100
that was perfect
that's the first time I've ever seen the ABBA rhyme scheme flow and rhyme well
the poem was simple and easy to understand, but it used metaphors and symbolism so the poetry noobs can still read great poetry without being completely lost
Ella, you're a poetic wonder |
k-contentbarrier-
Addict
Age: 33
Gender: Male
Posts: 14139 | August 8th, 2006 at 11:09pm OH MY GOD THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL. YOU'RE AMAZING.  wow. |
Miss_Minority039
Geek
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 332
| August 8th, 2006 at 11:10pm that is good verey talented |
newagecarny
Was Here Two Weeks Ago
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 42495
| August 9th, 2006 at 05:52am spill_no_sick:200/100
that was perfect
that's the first time I've ever seen the ABBA rhyme scheme flow and rhyme well
the poem was simple and easy to understand, but it used metaphors and symbolism so the poetry noobs can still read great poetry without being completely lost
Ella, you're a poetic wonder
Nick, you have just officially made my day.
LOL @ the poetry noobs part.
Thank you, thank you and thank you. :] |
Ol' Blue Eyes.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 4816
| August 9th, 2006 at 10:10am Aww, Ella, that was beautiful. Like everyone else, I love the rhyming. It has such great flow. |
