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11th Street Kid
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3645 | August 8th, 2006 at 02:07pm I quickly wrote this yesterday...maybe I'll work on it later. I might take away the last 4 lines in the 3rd verse or move them somewhere.. tell me what you think..
Nothing seems to satisfy
but it keeps me occupied.
Did you know?
Inspiration can last
as long as it began.
Behind the scenes
It's up for grabs
Feathers and dust
It'd be fateful luck
If in the night
In the dark
So unexpected
The package falls
Into your hands
Roses intertwined
Just for you
Capture me
Softly
The day will come
When the magic is undone
Death is no barrier
Just a swift curtain
Where it goes,
I don't know
Lean on me
The mask will sway in the breeze
You can't see
But it's there
Never wilting
Never fading
The dawn will tell
The dusk will start
Falling into entrance
Interpretation was never a cliche
It'll come undone.
Trust me.. |
Michake
Geek
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 295 | August 8th, 2006 at 02:10pm i wish i could wright like that |
11th Street Kid
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3645 | August 8th, 2006 at 02:22pm  Wow, thank you. |
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 2921
 | August 8th, 2006 at 02:25pm Ah! I love your poetic style! 
OSM, as always.  |
tomamazon
GSBitch
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Posts: 68084
 | August 8th, 2006 at 02:32pm It'll come undone.
Trust me..
Fuck me, that was fucking brilliant.
I've never read your stuff before, but this just blew me away. |
Ol' Blue Eyes.
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 36
Gender: Female
Posts: 4816
| August 8th, 2006 at 02:46pm Wow. Breathtaking. |
11th Street Kid
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3645 | August 8th, 2006 at 03:01pm  Thanks so much.
Reading peoples comments just made my day. xD |
paper shoes
This Board Is My Home
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 34269 | August 8th, 2006 at 07:00pm Simply beautiful.<3 |
11th Street Kid
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3645 | August 9th, 2006 at 12:13pm  I love you guys. Seriously. |
11th Street Kid
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3645 | August 9th, 2006 at 12:14pm I love you guys. Seriously. |
Skullivan.[Im Not Okay]
Geek
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 225 | August 9th, 2006 at 12:26pm wow. just simply amazing! |
davey jones.
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 7018
| August 9th, 2006 at 12:57pm 
That's great!
I want to write something like that.  |
11th Street Kid
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 3645 | August 9th, 2006 at 04:11pm Cheers xD |
