Coffee_Lover
Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie
Age: -
Gender: -
Posts: 34 | December 14th, 2006 at 05:36pm I am just a kid,
That is what you say,
Your rules that forbid,
Me to hang and play,
You say that is that,
You give me no choice,
You talked as I sat,
Giving me no voice,
But I’m not silent,
I’m taking a stand,
With out violent,
I give a command,
I speak for my mind,
Saying all I can,
No longer refined,
This is my new plan,
Four more years from now,
I will be eighteen,
You may wonder how,
No longer pre teen,
None of my business,
Don’t need know a thing,
You just let me guess,
Knowing every thing
I venture in hope,
A brand new adult,
No more a kid, nope,
Beginning adult |
ohmygodshutyourbutt
Idiot
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 769
 | December 14th, 2006 at 05:43pm S'Alright. |
*they_call_me Ri*
Geek
Age: 33
Gender: Female
Posts: 177 | December 14th, 2006 at 05:46pm eh. |
new.slang
Idiot
Age: 34
Gender: Female
Posts: 764 | December 14th, 2006 at 06:13pm I don't love it. I didn't really see the need for rhyming, but I rarely do. I think you could use a little more description or, like, excitement. |
swoon-
Post Whore
Age: 32
Gender: Female
Posts: 1 000 000
 | December 14th, 2006 at 06:16pm The rhyming's kind of forced.
But I’m not silent,
I’m taking a stand,
With out violent,
I give a command,
With out violence is more grammatically correct. |
