"I Love You."

Board index - Your poetry

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December Cynic Geek Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 328	December 25th, 2006 at 07:57pm Utter a phrase Bordering the unheard as it may seem Are you scared? Are you nervous? Are you shaking at the knees...? Dear boy Become a man Declare a phrase Shouting it so loud it comes out as a scream Are you sick? Are you twisted? Are you caught in a dream...? Carry her away on your blanket of words "I love you" Is all she heard "I love you" Is what you whispered "I love you" Is your blanket of words "I love you" Is all she heard Utter a phrase Bordering the unheard as it may seem Are you scared? Are you nervous? Are you shaking at the knees...? Dear boy Become a man Declare a phrase Shouting it so loud it comes out as a scream --- Hearts hearts hearts. Lol Yeah...COMMENT PLEASE! I lub you :] Woah...I just typed 'I lube you'.
Mrs. Lee Jackass Age: - Gender: - Posts: 1428	December 26th, 2006 at 09:30am Wow. That's really good lyrics for a song. I rather lyrics than poems. I don't think I can give you any constructive criticism. It's perfect to me. Well fucking done.
December Cynic Geek Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 328	December 26th, 2006 at 07:02pm Kerplunk Girl: Wow. That's really good lyrics for a song. I rather lyrics than poems. I don't think I can give you any constructive criticism. It's perfect to me. Well fucking done. SQUEE Thank you
ohmygodshutyourbutt Idiot Age: - Gender: Female Posts: 769	December 26th, 2006 at 07:05pm Good job. Gold star for you.
swoon- Post Whore Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 1 000 000	December 26th, 2006 at 07:44pm "I love you" Is all she heard Isn't that from Ohio Is For Lovers by Hawthorne Heights? Anyway I like how you repeated the Are you scared? Are you nervous? Are you shaking at the knees...? Dear boy Become a man Declare a phrase Shouting it so loud it comes out as a scream And that you didn't try to force the rhyming. I suck at concrit, sorry.
Jessika with a K Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: 31 Gender: Female Posts: 4	December 26th, 2006 at 07:47pm I think that you if you started a band than you wouldn't be very good in it, but your lyrics would be!! Lol just kidding I don't know if you are going to be good in a band!!

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