All Storms Lull, Sooner or Later

My contribution to The GSB Writers Circle. It was appreciated there, hope you like it too.



All Storms Lull, Sooner or Later

The mirror calmly reflects forms within the frame
Of blue heaven above and vivid earth around, but
raging currents whirl restlessly behind the surface.
A maelstrom soon rises from the gloomy depths
and tears the tranquility to shreds.

Crushed are the reflecting ponds of the soul
by a turmoil waging storms behind the eyelids.
Waves lashes up and foaming white horses
beat themselves unconscious on the retina.

Tiredly hope sinks deeper down in darkening water,
wet wings are weighting heavily on every move, and
salvation seems to whisper one last, soft goodbye.
The mind floods, bursting the damns, and water
escapes by tumbling through the iris.

The storm passes leaving two devastated
lakes behind but as the wind lulls they mend.
The shattered pieces all float back into place
as long as there only is an ounce of faith.

Fear not the storm, nor the fury of the water
Because all storms, even the wildest, do lull.

Waves lashes up and foaming white horses
beat themselves unconscious on the retina.

Um. Whoa.

Wicked metaphor much?

That was really great! I loved all the imagery and the metaphors and similes comparing this storm to crying eyes(I guess that is what it was; that's what I took away from it anyway). I also loved the italicized bottom lines. That kinda seems to be a staple of your poems is the powerful words at the bottom relating to the poem and title. Very good.

Electrocore Panda.:

Waves lashes up and foaming white horses
beat themselves unconscious on the retina.

Um. Whoa.

Wicked metaphor much?

Thank you, Panda

josh_oliday23:

That was really great! I loved all the imagery and the metaphors and similes comparing this storm to crying eyes(I guess that is what it was; that's what I took away from it anyway). I also loved the italicized bottom lines. That kinda seems to be a staple of your poems is the powerful words at the bottom relating to the poem and title. Very good.

Thanks. Thank you very much (and you’re right btw). Yeah, the italics, I figured I needed it to sort of sum the poem up and tie it all together. I guess it worked then ^_^

I told you what I thought of this in the writers' circle. I love.

Yeah, I know. Thank you