Our Love

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Deernt. Rotting On Here Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 48258	March 11th, 2007 at 10:46pm Alright, this was for an English project and I had to write a sonnet. I know I didn't follow the rules completely because of the absence of the Iambic Pentameter, but I still have the 14 lines. Here we go. Our Love Our love is unbearable at times The passion, the anger and everything else in between Our love is like an ornament that always chimes You are my King and I am your Queen You sent me an invitation to your heart An invitation I will always keep The moment I met you, my life came to a start There is never any reason to weep Eternal love proclaimed through your eyes Our love is always preserved like fallen snow Contemplative morals, the love can only rise When you speak, it sounds like the words flow Our love has no departure or deadlines I’m forever yours and you’re forever mine Critique away.
Deernt. Rotting On Here Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 48258	March 13th, 2007 at 03:19pm Anyone?
Milk King For A Couple Of Days Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 3741	March 14th, 2007 at 11:51pm That was wonderful. It made me feel things. o_o And I really, really like the last stanza Our love has no departure or deadlines I’m forever yours and you’re forever mine
Deernt. Rotting On Here Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 48258	March 15th, 2007 at 02:24pm Thanks Krysta. It means a lot, especially from you because you actually like my material. Thanks again.
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD Falling In Love With The Board Age: 87 Gender: Female Posts: 5844	March 15th, 2007 at 02:27pm Very, VERY good. I loved the last two lines. Brilliant. You have talent, my dear.
Deernt. Rotting On Here Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 48258	March 15th, 2007 at 02:39pm Thank you very much. I'm all happy now. I DO? Thank you!
Ex.Of.A.Freak.-TCD Falling In Love With The Board Age: 87 Gender: Female Posts: 5844	March 15th, 2007 at 02:46pm You're quite welcome, hun. Your style is very unique, actually. Normally, styles like that don't fit into poetry, but you took it and made it entirely your own. I must say, I respect you a lot for that. Anyways, great job.

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