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Age: 33
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Posts: 182
 | May 20th, 2007 at 08:10pm Freedom, simple, desirable,
Yet unattainable,
Shackled to where I stand,
Unable to move - except to fall,
No escape, No release, Bound and unable to break free,
Shouts and jeers come from within,
Wondering what unforgivable sin,
I'd commited to end up here,
Scared of them and what they bring,
Bearers of bad news
Illusions of ill fates convinced me that i had come so far,
So close, to finding who I'm supposed to be,
And left behind the ties that bound me
I now only realise I'm unable to move,
And am stuck where I began,
So now I sit and wait in fear,
Waiting till i can see the light,
See the right,
Differ between the truth and lies,
Undo these shakles and leave all this behind
Opinions?
Comments?
(Personally dont love the 3rd stanza...but what are you gonna do?) |
[[PoliticalPunk.]]
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Age: 33
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| May 21st, 2007 at 05:36pm Feedback? |
[[PoliticalPunk.]]
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| May 21st, 2007 at 05:37pm C'mon, some form of what you think would be apprciated |
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Posts: 257 | May 22nd, 2007 at 09:30pm I love it. The flow was pretty good!!!!
Great Job!!!!!  |
Violet SKY.
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Gender: Female
Posts: 279 | May 25th, 2007 at 03:11pm its ace tbf *gives thumbs up* =] |
