anti-bush, anti-war (this is not a poetry but a song)

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punk_thrash_chick Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 14	May 30th, 2006 at 01:40am Thirteen and dont know much about life War is going on You all confuse and miserable And don't know what's going on Saying shit you don't know what you'll talking about Sitting there yakking away like you know EVERYTHING!!! The shit that you buy goes up Tax goes up. People complaining While the Sweet Children just sit there laughing Mom and Dad blames it on the other guy! I blame it on Bush! He is a sexist, a facist, a crachead! Who got us in this mess He is the one responsible for this shit He got everyone living in merisy In a world of pain Full of blood in everyone hand The other guy that attack he is an asshole But you don't have to be racist to the middle east. You all talking about peace (How come I don't see peace) Just violence and innocence Lifes dieing EVERYDAY While the streets are torn and every house burn down Don't like Bush! Kill Saddam! Thanks for making me hate this world Unity to pledge Allegiance to the UNDERWORLD! We are living in a world of hell!!!!!!!!! O yeah before the end comes Thank you for listening to this song!
Garrett Hanlund This Board Is My Home Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 30801	May 30th, 2006 at 02:40am Whoa, uhm. To start, the flow was..pretty off. Typos and grammar need some work. The reasoning behind the song is good, though. I personally don't like the way it ended. =/ Favorite line: "Tax goes up. People complaining While the Sweet Children just sit there laughing" It seemed to flow more than the rest.
clark GSBitch Age: 32 Gender: Male Posts: 79047	May 30th, 2006 at 02:47am This kind of sounds like a rip-off of 90765 Green Day songs.
Megan. Falling In Love With The Board Age: - Gender: - Posts: 6962	May 30th, 2006 at 03:26am I have no comment sinse I'm not anti-bush.
Spirit of 1977 Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 58	May 30th, 2006 at 09:32am wow, i'm anti-bush incredibly and that was downright horrible.
Kme Jackass Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1279	May 30th, 2006 at 11:02am It was really good. I give it two thumbs up...
spill_no_sick Falling In Love With The Board Age: 31 Gender: - Posts: 8588	May 30th, 2006 at 11:14am Megan.: I have no comment sinse I'm not anti-bush. you don't have to be anti-Bush to know it sucks
Kurtni Admin Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 34289	May 30th, 2006 at 11:21am "He is a sexist, a facist, a crachead!" So I guess that makes you judgmental, immature and unarticulate It's ok to have opinions about people, but to call that poetry isn't. No flow, no rythem, no real vibe. It was a jumbled mix of words. Just because this is a Green Day fansite doesnt mean we all love anti-Bush stuff.
newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495	May 30th, 2006 at 11:23am spill_no_sick: Megan.: I have no comment sinse I'm not anti-bush. you don't have to be anti-Bush to know it sucks Nick.... XDD
Matt Smith Admin Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 31134	May 30th, 2006 at 11:27am Does Bush actually use Cocaine or were you making that up? Because I think that is slander...
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	May 30th, 2006 at 11:30am spill_no_sick: Megan.: I have no comment sinse I'm not anti-bush. you don't have to be anti-Bush to know it sucks Fantastic.
Spirit of 1977 Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: - Gender: - Posts: 58	May 30th, 2006 at 12:06pm though this song was horrible, i would like to thank you for posting it. i really feel a lot better about all the songs i wrote in elementary school. "the owl's dance" wasn't actually that bad...
Slappy Geek Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 158	May 30th, 2006 at 12:35pm Ill just cut to the chase. That was shitty.
Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161	May 30th, 2006 at 01:16pm international_idiot: spill_no_sick: Megan.: I have no comment sinse I'm not anti-bush. you don't have to be anti-Bush to know it sucks Fantastic. As in what spill_no_sick said... for the record. It was actually the most ridiculous thing I've ever read. Half of it's plain slander, and the rest is just... God, I don't know. But it's not lyrical. Really.
Last Kennedy Alive Geek Age: - Gender: - Posts: 324	May 30th, 2006 at 01:23pm Short Notice™: This kind of sounds like a rip-off of 90765 Green Day songs.
Kme Jackass Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 1279	May 30th, 2006 at 01:31pm Guys...you're being a little critical. Maybe he or she thought it would make you laugh. Or smile at least. Not totally bash her. I would cry if everyone jumped on me like that. And I've read worse things.
Slappy Geek Age: - Gender: Male Posts: 158	May 30th, 2006 at 01:33pm Well didnt you say "I wish i didnt have thumbs because it really fucking sucked."? Exactly.
Kurtni Admin Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 34289	May 30th, 2006 at 01:36pm Anything you post in this forum is up for critiscm, and when posting you know that. If she didnt want our opinions, she wouldnt have posted. A lack of creativity is sweeping this forum at an alarming rate and it's a bit depressing.
Kurtni Admin Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 34289	May 30th, 2006 at 01:38pm Slappy: Well didnt you say "I wish i didnt have thumbs because it really fucking sucked."? Exactly. No, now she edited it to say "It was really good. I give it two thumbs up..."
punk_thrash_chick Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 14	May 30th, 2006 at 01:38pm i dont care i only post this to ask for a lil advice on how to write music cuz im a newbie at writin song and im actually happy that ppl r tellin me this stuff so i can know what to change to make my song better

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