Thirteen and dont know much about life
War is going on
You all confuse and miserable
And don't know what's going on
Saying shit you don't know what you'll talking about
Sitting there yakking away like you know
EVERYTHING!!!
The shit that you buy goes up
Tax goes up. People complaining
While the Sweet Children just sit there laughing
Mom and Dad blames it on the other guy!
I blame it on Bush!
He is a sexist, a facist, a crachead!
Who got us in this mess
He is the one responsible for this shit
He got everyone living in merisy
In a world of pain
Full of blood in everyone hand
The other guy that attack
he is an asshole
But you don't have to be racist
to the middle east.
You all talking about peace (How come I don't see peace)
Just violence and innocence
Lifes dieing
EVERYDAY
While the streets are torn and every house burn down
Don't like Bush! Kill Saddam!
Thanks for making me hate this world
Unity to pledge Allegiance to the UNDERWORLD!
We are living in a world of hell!!!!!!!!!
O yeah before the end comes
Thank you for listening to this song!
Whoa, uhm. To start, the flow was..pretty off. Typos and grammar need some work. The reasoning behind the song is good, though. I personally don't like the way it ended. =/
Favorite line: "Tax goes up. People complaining
While the Sweet Children just sit there laughing"
So I guess that makes you judgmental, immature and unarticulate
It's ok to have opinions about people, but to call that poetry isn't. No flow, no rythem, no real vibe. It was a jumbled mix of words. Just because this is a Green Day fansite doesnt mean we all love anti-Bush stuff.
though this song was horrible, i would like to thank you for posting it. i really feel a lot better about all the songs i wrote in elementary school. "the owl's dance" wasn't actually that bad...
Guys...you're being a little critical. Maybe he or she thought it would make you laugh. Or smile at least. Not totally bash her. I would cry if everyone jumped on me like that. And I've read worse things.
Anything you post in this forum is up for critiscm, and when posting you know that. If she didnt want our opinions, she wouldnt have posted. A lack of creativity is sweeping this forum at an alarming rate and it's a bit depressing.
i dont care i only post this to ask for a lil advice on how to write music cuz im a newbie at writin song and im actually happy that ppl r tellin me this stuff so i can know what to change to make my song better