| Author | Message |
|---|
ThisIsGreenDay
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Posts: 4683
 | October 22nd, 2006 at 08:17am  schweet. |
ThisIsGreenDay
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Posts: 4683
| October 23rd, 2006 at 04:17am lyrical_gaah52:It's a little...unformatted. There's no uniform ryhme scheme or anything. It's, I guess free verse. But yeah. I had to re read the chapter to write it and cried again. I'm crying right now.  Anyway, it's written from Billie's point of view. I wanted to do Caroline's, but that's kinda hard, and too sad.
I Care
It’s seven o clock
The phone rings
The world is busy with trivial things
Perhaps I shouldn’t have answered
Let it wait and stew
I didn’t want to know
I couldn’t lose him and you.
The hospital is busy
Doctors and temperatures high
But I’m cold, so cold.
I don’t want to know
What’s going on and why
You’re standing all alone
Straining your tears and moans
But it’s okay; I’m here now.
You’re trying to speak
But do I want to know?
Just hush,
I’ll be your shoulder to cry on.
It rushes through
All at one time
Your screams, your sobs,
The bad news, the hurt
I’ll be your rock
But he was mine.
And then the denial
Change the story
The one I want to hear
You’re eyes are still wet
You hold me near
Telling me he’ll be alright
Saying he’ll make it through the night.
How do I say
What you don’t want to know?
He…
Yes, he’ll be okay
When you’re like this
I just can’t speak
The truth, that lie
It makes us both weak
But eventually,
We choose to realize
The horror right
That stands in front of our eyes
You’re screaming
Whimpering, don’t leave me too!
It’s not your fault
And it wasn’t mine
But it wasn’t fair!
It wasn’t his time!
Rock yourself
Your tears to sleep
You want him next to you.
Afraid to wake
Because you want to keep
Him always next to you.
Tonight I’ll be him
I’ll lie next to you
When the morning comes
I’ll stand by you.
And when the moment passes
I’ll keep wondering why
You had to suffer, him and you
I didn’t want to know.
 |
*60sChild*
Geek
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 239
| October 23rd, 2006 at 09:50am Holly I've just read two chapters of this and its wonderful but have now just realised its part of a trilogy. How stupid am I?  Need to catch up a bit more on here!!
*goes now to read first story* |
One Nut Wonder
Geek
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Posts: 304
| October 23rd, 2006 at 09:14pm ThisIsGreenDay:lyrical_gaah52:It's a little...unformatted. There's no uniform ryhme scheme or anything. It's, I guess free verse. But yeah. I had to re read the chapter to write it and cried again. I'm crying right now. Anyway, it's written from Billie's point of view. I wanted to do Caroline's, but that's kinda hard, and too sad.
I Care
It’s seven o clock
The phone rings
The world is busy with trivial things
Perhaps I shouldn’t have answered
Let it wait and stew
I didn’t want to know
I couldn’t lose him and you.
The hospital is busy
Doctors and temperatures high
But I’m cold, so cold.
I don’t want to know
What’s going on and why
You’re standing all alone
Straining your tears and moans
But it’s okay; I’m here now.
You’re trying to speak
But do I want to know?
Just hush,
I’ll be your shoulder to cry on.
It rushes through
All at one time
Your screams, your sobs,
The bad news, the hurt
I’ll be your rock
But he was mine.
And then the denial
Change the story
The one I want to hear
You’re eyes are still wet
You hold me near
Telling me he’ll be alright
Saying he’ll make it through the night.
How do I say
What you don’t want to know?
He…
Yes, he’ll be okay
When you’re like this
I just can’t speak
The truth, that lie
It makes us both weak
But eventually,
We choose to realize
The horror right
That stands in front of our eyes
You’re screaming
Whimpering, don’t leave me too!
It’s not your fault
And it wasn’t mine
But it wasn’t fair!
It wasn’t his time!
Rock yourself
Your tears to sleep
You want him next to you.
Afraid to wake
Because you want to keep
Him always next to you.
Tonight I’ll be him
I’ll lie next to you
When the morning comes
I’ll stand by you.
And when the moment passes
I’ll keep wondering why
You had to suffer, him and you
I didn’t want to know.
Oh my god.... that poems deep. Its really good. |
ThisIsGreenDay
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Posts: 4683
| October 26th, 2006 at 04:53am Oi, I worte a lot of part 5 last night but it drained me emotionally so I had to stop. Am continuing tonight, with hopes of banging the rest out. |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Posts: 5236
 | October 26th, 2006 at 01:23pm Yay! |
ThisIsGreenDay
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Posts: 4683
| October 27th, 2006 at 07:41am Finally finished part 5. It has officially been submitted!
*LETS OUT BIG FUCKING BREATH OF RELIEF* |
ThisIsGreenDay
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Posts: 4683
| October 30th, 2006 at 04:18am How has part 5, the most emotional chapter ever, not been posted yet?
*cries forever*
 |
Reality Is Due
Post Whore
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Posts: 24495
| October 30th, 2006 at 04:28am ThisIsGreenDay:How has part 5, the most emotional chapter ever, not been posted yet?
*cries forever*
You mean part 5 is more emotional than part 3?
 Do you just want us to cry all day long?
From what I see here,the story is somewhere in the middle of the story list... |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Posts: 5236
| October 30th, 2006 at 12:09pm ThisIsGreenDay:How has part 5, the most emotional chapter ever, not been posted yet?
*cries forever*
More emotional? Damn...I was awake at 12 AM crying over fictional people!!! And now I'm going to do it again?
And for some reason, that's exactly why I love GSB. |
Banach95
Moderator
Age: 35
Gender: Female
Posts: 4818
| October 31st, 2006 at 01:56am Better have some hankies close by folks when you read this chappy...
CHAPTER 5 |
ThisIsGreenDay
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Posts: 4683
| October 31st, 2006 at 06:14am sampalletband:Better have some hankies close by folks when you read this chappy...
CHAPTER 5 |
*60sChild*
Geek
Age: -
Gender: Female
Posts: 239
| October 31st, 2006 at 07:48am I've read Better Man and now I'm half way through Best Man
and I'm addicted, I love it so so much  |
AndTheCowSaidMoo
Geek
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Posts: 446
| October 31st, 2006 at 01:05pm I read it.
I think my comment said all I have to say.
As always, I was in awe. |
lyrical_mess
Falling In Love With The Board
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Posts: 5236
| October 31st, 2006 at 02:44pm Oh God. I'm crying. Still crying. It was really good. I have never been able to bring that realistic feeling into my work, and I applaud that you can. I am...*wails*.
I'm reminding myself that it's just a story and that no one's dead. Jesus woman, this is what you do to me. |
One Nut Wonder
Geek
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Posts: 304
| October 31st, 2006 at 09:32pm Your stories are so realistic. I thought Mike's death actually happened.... and then I remembered it was just a story. The latest chapter made me think back....back to my mother's funeral.... It's true, the younger kids don't know whats going on. Trust me, I know. I didn't know what was happening until my mommy didn't come home for a week.
(when you read my comment don't feel sad for me) |
GrEeNdAyLoVeRr
Jackass
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Posts: 1134 | November 1st, 2006 at 01:35pm Amazing.
I sobbed, and went and hugged my mom and told her all about your story and sobbed some more. She thinks I'm crazy.
Mike's gone?  |
ThisIsGreenDay
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Posts: 4683
| November 2nd, 2006 at 03:59am Making readers emotional wrecks is fun.  |
One Nut Wonder
Geek
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Posts: 304
| November 2nd, 2006 at 04:31am ThisIsGreenDay:Making readers emotional wrecks is fun.
Thats not nice.... You made me remember bad things.... I still love you though . You write some of the best damn stories on this site. You and Michelle do. My stories are crap compared to your guys'. |
ThisIsGreenDay
King For A Couple Of Days
Age: 24
Gender: Female
Posts: 4683
| November 2nd, 2006 at 04:34am My OMGsb!!11 is finally up and working, yay!
This is what it looks like:
It's blurry as all fuck because of the damn JPG thing. |
