i dont care i only post this to ask for a lil advice on how to write music cuz im a newbie at writin song and im actually happy that ppl r tellin me this stuff so i can know what to change to make my song better
Well, with that said, we didn't give very much constructive help did we? Before you post things, read them out loud, what looks good on paper and what sounds good tend to differ. Also, free verse is excellent, but a poetic vibe doesnt hurt, a "flow" if you will. Keep writting.
Very nice! I love it...it's everything I couldnt find words to explain. -10-
FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921
May 30th, 2006 at 03:14pm
Yes, you need to work on the flow. If you're going to write something political, do some research first, please. Usually metaphors work rather well in getting a point across, just as long as they're not too confusing. Try using some of those.
Garrett Hanlund This Board Is My Home Age: 32 Gender: Female Posts: 30801
May 30th, 2006 at 03:19pm
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Yes, you need to work on the flow. If you're going to write something political, do some research first, please. Usually metaphors work rather well in getting a point across, just as long as they're not too confusing. Try using some of those.
Yes! Zomigah, I love metaphors. And... ignore the harsh comments with no tips or critisms. Keep working at it, in time you will get better. You should see my first poem.
spill_no_sick Falling In Love With The Board Age: 31 Gender: - Posts: 8588
May 30th, 2006 at 04:57pm
Bloodraine:
Does Bush actually use Cocaine or were you making that up?
Because I think that is slander...
slander isn't protected by the First Amendment but Bush did use cocain in the seventies
spill_no_sick Falling In Love With The Board Age: 31 Gender: - Posts: 8588
May 30th, 2006 at 05:02pm
never EVER right anything anti-war because no one can pull it off
there are a select few like Primus's Too Many Puppies and some songs by The Clash
but Green Day couldn't pull it off and not many people here are as good as Green Day
just stay away from cliche topics or be prepared for the honest people here to slam you