American Idiot. Act 1, Scene 12
GIVE ME NOVICANE/DRY ICE
ACT ONE SCENE TWELVE
(Curtains open on the corner and the stage is empty. Enter Jos SL, hands in pockets, head hung, he sits against the wall.)
Jos: Take away the sensation inside, bitter sweet migraine in my head, it’s like a throbbing tooth ache of the mind…I can't take this feeling anymore.
Jos: Why did I do that? Why did I tell her I loved her?
Jos: Drain the pressure from the swelling. This sensation’s overwhelming! Give me a long kiss goodnight and everything will be alright, tell me Jimmy I won't feel a thing, so Give Me Novocain…
(Enter G SR. She walks to Jos and hands him a bottle)
G: It might not be Novocain but it’ll get the job done.
Jos: Thanks
(Take’s a drink, then chokes on it)
G: It’s a little strong, but you get used to it.
(Jos drinks a little more.)
G: I’m Gloria by the way.
(G sits and extends hand)
Jos: Jos
(Shakes G’s hand)
G: Well hello there Jos, you wanna tell me why a guy like you is wasting his time around here?
(G pulls out a smaller bottle)
Jos: Love.
G: In love?
(Jos shakes his head)
Jos: Out of love
G: Ah I know the feeling, cheers to that.
Jos: To fall in love and fall in debt.
G: To alcohol and cigarettes.
(Clink bottles)
G: So who’s the lucky lady?
Jos: Christian’s sister.
G: The redhead? Good choice, she’s pretty.
Jos: No. She’s beautiful.
(G looks up SL)
G: Well speak of the devils brother…
(C enters SL)
C: Hey Jos, Hi Gloria.
(Jos looks at C then G, then back at C.)
Jos: I’ll let you two be
(He gets up to leave)
C: Actually, I gotta talk to you Jos.
Jos: Ok what’s up?
C: My sister feels awful and wants to know if you could give her a second chance…
Jos: (Excited) Really?
(C nods)
Jos: Could you tell me about her? I barley know anything about her.
C: Well her favorite color is red, she finds politics incredibly stupid, she plays the guitar, but doesn’t own one. She’s 17, hates seafood, and is a generally unpleasant person if you don’t know her well.
(C laughs)
C: Her real name is James..
(Jos cuts off C)
Jos: James?
C: Our parents desperately wanted two boys.
Jos: Oh, ok then...
C: But she hates being called that.
Jos: So what can I call her?
C: Well Whatsername calls her Jay, but I call her Jamie.
Jos: What about Jimmy? That’s short for James right?
(C pulls Jos closer and whispers)
C: That’s another story for another day, but for now, don’t call her that.
(C goes back to normal)
C: Did you get all of that?
Jos: I think so…
C: Then go get her Romeo.
(Jos exit’s SL, C walks up to G and she looks up.)
G: Hey Christy, would you mind keeping me company?
C: Sure.
G: Sit down then.
(G pats the ground next to her and C sits about a foot away. She scoots over and leans on his shoulder)
C: Jos isn’t the only one with love issues you know.
G: Is that so?
C: Yeah, I can’t figure out how to tell this girl how I feel, I mean, the other day I tried to
send a letter to that girl asking her to by my own. But my pen was writing wrong, so I'll say it in a song. Oh I love you more right now, more than I've ever loved before. Hear those words straight from these lips, I'll need you forever more! Gloria, I think I love you. And I think you’re the only one for me.
(G pushes some hair off her face)
G: I love you too Christian.
C: Forever?
(C pulls out a ring. G gasps then giggles)
G: Forever.
(C puts the ring on G and they start to kiss.)
(Curtain)
ACT ONE SCENE TWELVE
(Curtains open on the corner and the stage is empty. Enter Jos SL, hands in pockets, head hung, he sits against the wall.)
Jos: Take away the sensation inside, bitter sweet migraine in my head, it’s like a throbbing tooth ache of the mind…I can't take this feeling anymore.
Jos: Why did I do that? Why did I tell her I loved her?
Jos: Drain the pressure from the swelling. This sensation’s overwhelming! Give me a long kiss goodnight and everything will be alright, tell me Jimmy I won't feel a thing, so Give Me Novocain…
(Enter G SR. She walks to Jos and hands him a bottle)
G: It might not be Novocain but it’ll get the job done.
Jos: Thanks
(Take’s a drink, then chokes on it)
G: It’s a little strong, but you get used to it.
(Jos drinks a little more.)
G: I’m Gloria by the way.
(G sits and extends hand)
Jos: Jos
(Shakes G’s hand)
G: Well hello there Jos, you wanna tell me why a guy like you is wasting his time around here?
(G pulls out a smaller bottle)
Jos: Love.
G: In love?
(Jos shakes his head)
Jos: Out of love
G: Ah I know the feeling, cheers to that.
Jos: To fall in love and fall in debt.
G: To alcohol and cigarettes.
(Clink bottles)
G: So who’s the lucky lady?
Jos: Christian’s sister.
G: The redhead? Good choice, she’s pretty.
Jos: No. She’s beautiful.
(G looks up SL)
G: Well speak of the devils brother…
(C enters SL)
C: Hey Jos, Hi Gloria.
(Jos looks at C then G, then back at C.)
Jos: I’ll let you two be
(He gets up to leave)
C: Actually, I gotta talk to you Jos.
Jos: Ok what’s up?
C: My sister feels awful and wants to know if you could give her a second chance…
Jos: (Excited) Really?
(C nods)
Jos: Could you tell me about her? I barley know anything about her.
C: Well her favorite color is red, she finds politics incredibly stupid, she plays the guitar, but doesn’t own one. She’s 17, hates seafood, and is a generally unpleasant person if you don’t know her well.
(C laughs)
C: Her real name is James..
(Jos cuts off C)
Jos: James?
C: Our parents desperately wanted two boys.
Jos: Oh, ok then...
C: But she hates being called that.
Jos: So what can I call her?
C: Well Whatsername calls her Jay, but I call her Jamie.
Jos: What about Jimmy? That’s short for James right?
(C pulls Jos closer and whispers)
C: That’s another story for another day, but for now, don’t call her that.
(C goes back to normal)
C: Did you get all of that?
Jos: I think so…
C: Then go get her Romeo.
(Jos exit’s SL, C walks up to G and she looks up.)
G: Hey Christy, would you mind keeping me company?
C: Sure.
G: Sit down then.
(G pats the ground next to her and C sits about a foot away. She scoots over and leans on his shoulder)
C: Jos isn’t the only one with love issues you know.
G: Is that so?
C: Yeah, I can’t figure out how to tell this girl how I feel, I mean, the other day I tried to
send a letter to that girl asking her to by my own. But my pen was writing wrong, so I'll say it in a song. Oh I love you more right now, more than I've ever loved before. Hear those words straight from these lips, I'll need you forever more! Gloria, I think I love you. And I think you’re the only one for me.
(G pushes some hair off her face)
G: I love you too Christian.
C: Forever?
(C pulls out a ring. G gasps then giggles)
G: Forever.
(C puts the ring on G and they start to kiss.)
(Curtain)
I dunno if it seemed like it but I'm not upset by your comment. I don't want this to start a fight, I just wanted to explain my mindset. All that I've said in the comments I've tried to make sound calm. And hey, I'm 16, I know I'm not the next Poe, I just like to write. :]
Thank you for your opinon, and for future reference, I'm a girl haha
Lucky 13, December 9th, 2010 at 01:10:31pm
Even Romeo and Juliet was more than 53(ish) lines...and I'm glad that was your intention, because thats a pretty good angle to go at, but it just looked rushed, forced and more than a little silly, in my opinion. I've seen a billion plays, I've studied 8 at least and none of the even slightly good ones, even Romeo and Juliet which is very fast paced, is not anywhere near that sudden. If you were going for the whole Elizabethan SUSPEND YOUR DISBELIEF thing, thats great too, but it doesn't seem that way and as nicely as possible, I really doubt that was your intention. It's really bi polar. I'm not saying create another story line, I'm saying if you want it to be better, maybe have them fight this one out a little longer, a little more realisticly than ~ idk mate, LETS GET MARRIED.
Don't be so defensive you guys, I'm only giving constructive criticism and my opinion, if it wasn't wanted, she (or he sorry idk you) wouldn't have posted it in the first place.
Yay!, December 9th, 2010 at 02:32:32am
I do see your point but this scene was like a shout out to Romeo and Juliet. It shows the instant love and it actually qoutes the play. The point is that Christian and Gloria are perfect for each other, period. And plays have to happen fast and be fairly simple. I already have 2 storylines going, a third would be over the top.
Lucky 13, December 8th, 2010 at 10:54:15pm
..you have a point about the honesty so my bad. However we're just teenagers. Give us time to grow up and don't smash our hopes please. Good writing takes time unless you're just a child prodegy. I see your point though.
Shoelace-Necktie, December 8th, 2010 at 04:41:43pm
Oh don't get me wrong, I like the idea of it and I haven't actualy read any of the others, it's just...this is really immature writing, too abc (boy meets girl, girl isn't sure, they get married), and thats fine, if you like simple writing. I don't, I prefer things with a more complex plot, things that have more substance. My opinion, really sorry if it offends you but I write myself and I'd want honesty, which is all I gave so I won't back off a bit ( : P), I don't expect you guys to agree.
Yay!, December 8th, 2010 at 02:22:02pm
I actually like it
it's creative and I like creative
and original
[:
Rage, December 8th, 2010 at 01:18:44pm
The only way to get better is to write so back off a bit. I like them you just might not. Anyway as I said it takes practice to get real good so don't be to hard on yourself.
Shoelace-Necktie, December 8th, 2010 at 11:24:46am
This is actually something I wrote, and yes, I know it sucks.
I guess I was just hoping someone would disagree but whatever...
Lucky 13, December 7th, 2010 at 12:33:31pm
This does not sound good..like at all. Is this the actual thing or just something you've made up? Sorry if it's something you made up...but whoa, that is pretty terrible writing...
Yay!, December 7th, 2010 at 12:10:31pm