The GSB Writers Circle.
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| lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278   | Yo people! I thought we needed a writers' circle and I couldn't find one...so I'm starting it!  K, the rules are simple. Every fortnight, there will be a new topic and everyone and anyone can post their poems pertaining to that topic. For example, if the topic was "fragility", then people could post poems about what that word means to them, the fragility of an object, a person, a relationship they've had, or anything else that has anything at all to do with fragility. You make a separate topic for your Writers Circle Poem with the name of the poem as the topic title. And in the little description box, you have to put "Writers Circle - [topic]" and everyone comments over there and the link is posted in here until the new topic, which will be posted here as well. The poem doesn’t have to be written specifically for the Writers’ Circle, it can be something you've written before and that you think would go really well with the topic. So #8 does not apply to this particular thread meaning that if you have posted a poem in the Poetry forum you can still post it for this thread. You can’t post the same poem twice within this thread though. You can comment on the poems that others have posted during that fortnight, and you're encouraged to do (but not forced), and as per the Poetry Thread rules: no useless flames or compliments. You must say what you like or dislike, offer improvements or constructive critisicm. But you don't have to comment if you don't want to follow those rules.  When the topic changes at the end of a fortnight, someone new will choose the new topic. For example, Person A chooses a topic. Then 2 weeks later, Person A chooses someone (person B) who chooses the next topic. Then, Person B chooses Person C. Person C choose the next topic. And when the time for a new topic arrives Person C may choose anyone she/he likes to start it and so on. But all those people are requested not to choose someone who's already been chosen once. Let's try and make sure all the GSB poets get a chance to choose! Are my instructions not clear? (Mod-person...?) PM me if you're confused. I'm gonna start! Whee! Okay, the topic for December 11 to December 25 is:...*drumroll*...... Simplicity Have fun! |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | You chose a difficult topic  Simplicity = Ease, Straightforwardness, Effortlessness, Plainness, Minimalism, Unfussiness, Cleanness This old poem is pretty straightforward ATTENTION! Just take it already. Crawl into a lonely hole and die, Say your prayers, say goodbye, Hold you breathe until you choke, Put an end to this joke. The rope suits the three in the yard, Kick the bucket, kick it hard. Raise a tombstone over your mind And leave all of this behind. Your life is no more fun than these simple rhymes Just admit it, it is the biggest waste of all times, Actually not even worth mentioning at all, It is too insignificant, it is a thing so small, So let’s end it before this grows way dull. Here’s a hammer “ crack open your skull. Nope, not directed to anyone specific, no I don’t hate and I wasn’t angry/upset when I wrote it. I just tried to capture a feeling and an atmosphere (among other things). And remember, in poems you have a lyrical me or a speaker. The lyrical me talks in first person. Just don't mistake the lyrical me for the writer, that’s not always the case |
| lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278 |  Yeah, I dunno what's wrong with me, but that cracked me up. I love the last two lines. I guess it's a simple solution : Go kill yourself, moron. that's probably not what you're saying at all, but that's what I got out of it. But I still liked it. |
| lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | lyrical_gaah52: No, but I fixed that  lyrical_gaah52: You’re not all that weird actually. It’s sort of supposed to be amusing, or you know, ironic. I think you did a real nice (read good) interpretation actually  Now about your poem. I like it, it’s pretty good. Very simple in structure and choice or words but real good when it comes to the rhyming scheme (not forced), the phrasing, and the way the topic is presented. I like how a simple poem presenting such simple things can be so powerful. The theme of your poem (or the poem’s spirit w/e) reminds me of the essence of Between Angels and Insects by Papa Roach. I love that song  |
| newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495 | |
| The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board  Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | About Quote Pyramids If you need to quote to avoid confusion that’s fine but let’s not quote more than about three persons. Simply put: long quote pyramids are not acceptable. They are difficult to read, take up room on the board and generally they are a bunch of nonsense. Also blank quotes are spam and spam can get you temporarily banned. View this as a rule for this thread (#No long quote pyramids) So remember:  © Picture provided by Over-Rated |
| lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278 | What's in a name?: Why thankee! I'm not much into Papa Roach, but thankee anyway. And I guess it should be simple, because its about well, being simple. Hence...Simplicity *dramatic effect* I wrote lots of these kinds of poems a few years ago. Got bored of it though... |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 | Uh...it has the word simplicities in it.  Lipstick Scribbles Literary references abound- you’ve lost your point. Overstated lipstick scribbles, crowded on the surface but empty within. Simplicities ranging from “I” to “you”, Double meanings you haven’t bothered to touch. Is simple really complicated after all? Better left open for interpretation; It’s an individual’s mind that strips away inhibitions through saturation. Infatuation and confusion go hand in hand, while Misunderstanding reigns high because the static-ridden air is too loud. Turn down the volume and we’ll hear that much more. All we’ve picked out are the silhouettes; The substance was a deserter, cowardly in all its significance. But of course, comprehension seems to have lost importance Throughout the vivid history of canvassed emotions. To keep such art from the world would surely be a crime. And so we have need to ask ourselves, was it really worth All the secrecy when it could have been spoken from the start? |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | Joan of Arc - it's deliciously like Sylvia Plath. This even more so than some of your other pieces. I think 'You promise potions and lotions to cure all sorts of maladies and tragedies' should be right... but with the little correction, it has to be my favourite line overall.  It just stuck out to me so much.Panda - It's... interesting. I say that because I'm sort of lost for words. It's something which makes you think so much. And I think you might be clinging onto the topic by a thread... Rose - Yes, I remember it... so bitterly ironic, it hurts.  |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | lyrical_gaah52: Yeah, it makes sense to write a simple poem about being simple I can see why you got bored of it though Ginger Nuts:  Never thought anyone would remember it! Thanks though ^-^ |
| FCPSITSGEPGEPGEPanda King For A Couple Of Days Age: 34 Gender: Female Posts: 2921 | Ginger Nuts:You think? |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | |
| wait_what Geek Age: 38 Gender: Female Posts: 411 | |
| lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278 | |
| wait_what Geek Age: 38 Gender: Female Posts: 411 | (I forgot to put this in yesterday... My bad.) What’s in a name?- While I’m not crazy about rhymes, this one is pretty cool. I do like the darkish humor present in it… It made me giggle a bit. Especially the last lines. The rhyming is a bit cliché, but you also said it was an old poem, so it’s all good. lyrical_gaah52- I absolutely love how the poem, overall, is just a simple, clean, clear poem. The rhyme scheme gets a bit confusing as you changed in the second stanza with waste, taste, and haste. Other than that, it’s really good. Ella- Very short and simple. I really like it. Especially the first stanza, it’s really quite a powerful poem for being so short. Joan of Arc of Suburbia- Holy shit. Very VERY reminiscent of Sylvia Plath. Extremely powerful… It’s almost scary. Like, if it’s written for anyone, they should be scared. Very apt metaphors and images. I love the line, “You with/ your flashing teeth like/ fairy lights; your incarnadine /irises. That memorable/ ursine howl that/ beckoned me for dinner.” Absolutely wonderful! The line breaks are also amazing. Good job!Panda- I love love LOVE that first line. Excellent poem, as always. I really love the overall feeling generated from the writer as conveyed to the reader. It’s interesting. Awesome metaphors and images. Just an excellent poem.lyrical_gaah52:  Thank you. |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | wait_what: Me neither I know it is and that’s not because it’s old, it’s because it’s supposed to look that way. Real blunt and cliché. It adds to the sarcastic effect (or it’s supposed to anyway =] ). But thank you. ^_^ |
| The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786 | What's In A Name :- I love the simplicity of this. It's got a whole...FOD vibe. The flows a bit chunky in places but very...nice song material. I'd guess. lyrical_gaah52:- That's quite good, I love the ideas behind the nature of beauty and such. It's not really pondered much here. I just am irked by the lack of punctuation XD sorry. Ella: I am exceedingly jealous of you. You can say a million words; condensed into a few. It was almost two Haikus really...running into each other. If you made them Haikus then that would be sweet but it's good the way it is. Panda:  Not really to the subject but it's gorgeous. I LOVE your freakin' word choice. LOVE.wait_what:- I love how you described the narrators mood through the metaphors of the weather.It's very...Robert Browing (Porpheria's Lover ) |
| wait_what Geek Age: 38 Gender: Female Posts: 411 | What's in a name?: Oh. I get it! That works. |
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