The GSB Writers Circle.
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| lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278   | Joan of Arc of Suburbia: Couldn't have said it better.  Now dear Joan (you're my GSB uncle!), I've finally figured out what I can say about your poem. Its just so...  in a  kind of way. Yes, I need emoticons to describe your poem. Its sad, I know. I love the fifth verse. There's something...sweetly evil-sounding about that. Something sincere and sarcastic, if I'm making any sense. Like, when I'm saying it out loud, it just sounds so...cool. I love the power that it radiates. And also, I had to go look up a few words, so thank you for expanding my vocabulary  . And like everyone said, it is very reminscent of Sylvia Plath and she'd probably be really pleased. Well, given her temperment and mental condition she'd probably be pissed off and want to hurt you, but still. You're a good writer. You're awesome. |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | |
| The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board  Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786 | lyrical_gaah52:  My niece  anyway...um...thank you bunches?  but anyways I'm all  (I speak with emoticons too  ) about my poem in your sig. |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | http://www.geekstinkbreath.net/board/viewtopic.php?p=5218577#5218577 I tried. I'm not sure how I kept to the subject though.  |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | Joan of Arc of Suburbia: Thanks  I know, I might fix that someday (if I can be bothered). I guess so.  wait_what: You’re poem is wonderful. I love the imagery, it’s beautiful. I’m not so sure about the flow however. To me it seems a bit bumpy. I guess it’s because of the way you split up the sentences. But I love the poem none the less |
| +Hybrid_Theory+ Shoot Me, I'm A Newbie  Age: - Gender: - Posts: 78 | |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | |
| lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278 | Ginger Nuts: That was really, really cool. You get all these, like, I dunno. You can see it. Anyway, I think it does keep to the subject, if you twist it a little. Like, things may not be as simple as one might think. |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | Thank you ^ It's really hard to write when you have to stick to a specific subject... but still, it'll make us even better if we can do it. |
| lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278 | C'mon people! There's a little more time! WRITE, DAMMIT! WRITE!!!!!!! WHAT ARE YOU? LAZY? STOOPID? WRITEEEEEE OR DIEEEEEEEE... </tirade> So um. Yeah. *cough*. We have a few more days. Write somethin'! Also, I may not be able to be on for the next few days. My parents are disconnecting the internet so that I'll study more.  Anyhoo, the person to choose the next topic is... Uncle Joan!!! |
| The Doctor Falling In Love With The Board Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 8786 | niiice. Uh, I might not be here *ducks from thrown inkpots*. So....the topic from 25th December to January 1st is... Faith Not the mod... Faith in yourself, faith in others, your faith, being (un)faithful, perhaps?  Enjoy. |
| newagecarny Was Here Two Weeks Ago  Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 42495 | |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | |
| lyrical_mess Falling In Love With The Board Age: 33 Gender: Female Posts: 5278 | Joan Greenwood: A six day topic? My dear Joany, it's a fortnight per topic...so it's from December 26 to...January 9. OMG that's day Lizzie comes back! |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | And that's an awesome topic. I'm going to have fun with this. |
| What's in a name? King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 2451 | |
| Ol' Blue Eyes. King For A Couple Of Days  Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 4816 | Eeeee! I like this thread a lot. I don't think I like my poem though... Faith I used to wonder if I should put any sort of faith in you Because, in all the time I've known you, you've played the rogue. You've been the jester, been the clown, serious you were not. So I kept my secrets safe distance, scared to share them with you. So ironic that you were the one to find me alone with my tears. Odd that you gathered me up, and listened to my woes. Strange to me that, not once, did you ever try to make a joke Out of the pain that filled my heart. You played the part of confessor* most beautifully, to my surprise, Patiently listening to my sobs without a hint of exasperation, As you carefully pieced together my broken heart With comforting words, while making a fortress of your arms. How wrong I was to doubt you, how wrong I was to put my faith elsewhere. Ewww.  Hokay, I'm so unsure of that word. I've heard priests called "Father Confessor" when they heard confessions, but I think I could be lying completely. |
| Peter Petrelli King For A Couple Of Days Age: 35 Gender: Female Posts: 4161 | I really liked this. The structure wasn't terribly stable, but I think that's just a personal thing of mine. I loved how you used typical ideas and imagery of religious faith, but turned it around to talk about love instead. (I reeeeally like the Father Confessor idea)The only criticism I have is that the last line sticks out from the rest of the poem a little too much. You could change it to 'How wrong I was to doubt you, how wrong to put my faith elsewhere' if you wanted to, but that's just an idea. |
| Ol' Blue Eyes. King For A Couple Of Days Age: 36 Gender: Female Posts: 4816 | Ginger Nuts:I think the last line was awkward as well, but I wasn't sure what to do with it. I like your idea tons. I'll use that, thanks a million.  |
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